Monday, January 15, 2007

Revelation

forlorn and gloomy
i stare at the moon,

where I see you curled

akin to an apostrophe.

suddenly

there is a swift revelation

that it is the moon

which is
lonesome,
like a parenthesis
without its mate.

25 comments:

getzapped said...

what a powerful little poem! Did you write it? Clever. Thank you.

Kindness (disarms the difficult) said...

i agree getzapped, powerful and at the same time so tender...

Lady Wordsmith said...

I read ... somewhere in your trail of comments on the blogs of others we both read ... that you're having a bit of difficulty finding your muse and goodly bits of poetry coming from your pen.

But here I come and read no evidence of said difficulty. None. Absolutely none.

"... that it is the moon
which is lonesome ..."

Fine work there luv

kj said...

like a parenthesis
without its mate.

wow. this is very beautiful.

you write beautifully.

Percival said...

Thine poems require more fatuousness, more frivolity, else - I add parenthetically - how am I to follow them?

sage said...

beautiful image in the poem, and the pic goes nicely with the poem

btw, last night I watched Water--I'll have a review up in a few days

sage said...

I meant to say Earth, I watched and reviewed Water a month or so ago

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

oh, this is beautiful! it was fun to read it out loud. :)

firebird said...

This is so beautiful! I will never look at the moon the same way--what an amazing image!

floots said...

love the way you've done this
especially that apostrophe image
cheers

Pat Paulk said...

I love it!! Good write!!

Ces said...

Gautami. my friend read this to me over the phone yesterday while I was working and when she mentioned your name as the author, I felt an exclamation mark. Of course, Gautami is a wonderful poet and I hastened to add a mathematician too! This is terrific.

gautami tripathy said...

getzapped: Thanks. What do you think?

kindness(disarms the difficult): Thanks.

lady wordsmith: I was having a problem writing poetey. I still have it. I kind of forced myself yesterday to just sit and write. At times one has to do it.

Thanks. My relationship with the moon is "love and hate" kind.

gautami tripathy said...

kj: Thanks. Sometimes words just flow, at others I have to make them flow.

percival: I will remember that for the next quaint verse I write, in parenthesis!!

sage: Thanks.
I look forward to your review of EARTH.

gautami tripathy said...

andrew: I hadn't read it out loud. Thanks for telling me.

firebird: It does look like alone, doesn't it?
:D

floots: Only you could point the apostrophe image. I am glad you did.

gautami tripathy said...

pat: thanks. You write so well.

ces: Gee, thanks. I don't know what else to say here....

magiceye said...

.......lovely.........

dsnake1 said...

the moon somehow holds me in awe.

and you have written an awesome piece about it. :)

polona said...

oh, gautami, i simply love this one. perhaps because i'm partial to the moon... :)

tlc illustration said...

Lovely imagery. I hope you really are not all that forlorn yourself though!

Javitz said...

Now I have to give it to you, the last two lines nailed it.

Amalendu said...

loved the way you put it Gautami

gautami tripathy said...

magic eye:Thanks!

dsnake1:moon affects us in numerous ways.

polona:Amen!

tlc:Arn't we all at one time or the other?

javitz: *smile*

amalendu: thanks!

Borut said...

Yes, what about the moon, without its mate!?

Lotus Reads said...

Being a Cancerian moon maiden, I really loved this poem, but even if I wasn't, I would still love it for your clever use of words, Gautami.