Friday, October 05, 2007

Fallen angels!-----[Fiction] Friday



[Fiction] Friday Challenge for October, 5 2007:
Use the first line of a nursery rhyme (your choice) to start your own story.

Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch a pail of water

born on the same day
inseparable since birth
both always had a say

about what went on in
the other’s life. toddler
days were not to be seen

for sometime now, even
childhood was left behind
adolescent feelings driven

to core. hormones bubbled
jumping forth. unfamiliar it
was too. step that stumbled

was no surprise. climbing hill
was but only an excuse. dread
after the deed added to thrill

to escape from parent's fury
they fell and faked self-injury!

14 comments:

Jo said...

Hilarious.

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Gautami, you have a sly way of getting your point across. ;)

Rose

xo

paisley said...

very crafty... if the deed is what i think it was......

~willow~ said...

Nice! :-)

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

That's great, Gautami! How on Earth do you come up with such sly works?

lissa said...

kind of fun reading this. Nice job.

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

You were so clever with this one. Guess your writers block is over!

Ther said...

i like this gautami. from half of a twin, i can understand this so well. =)

gautami tripathy said...

Nursery rhymes have much more to them than tha meets th eye. I just want o highlight that aspect!

Thanks!

polona said...

ohhh... another story behind the story
great!

floots said...

love what you did with this :)

Paul said...

I've decided that when I have children, they will be banned from having any nursery rhymes. At least until they are 18...

A cunning take on the rhyme - a lot of tumbling seems to go on for Jack & Jill...

Don Iannone said...

Very creative! Enjoyed this one.

AscenderRisesAbove said...

twins? oh interesting; i always assumed they were bf/gf; wishing I had the ability to write like you!