Sunday, October 14, 2007

weeds of war---Cafe Writing & Monday Poetry Train

listen to the world gone shallow
spirit is hunted as well haunted

dreams that soared are now sour
weeds take over reason tenuously

clamouring to get a hold, thriving
in the aftermath. thorns of combat

pierce all but the one who started it
closing his eyes, he refuses to budge.

“war goes on, it has from time immemorial”

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Wrote this short piece for Cafe Writing October Project Option five where one has to choose at least 3 words from the following and include those in an essay, story or poetry:

dream, weed, spirit, listen, crisp, shallow, tenuous, mischievous

Posting this for Monday Poetry Train too...

24 comments:

MissMeliss said...

The link will be live in about five minutes, and Gautami, I'm so sorry, I thought I'd left a comment inviting you to play!

But you found us anyway, and I'm glad :)

Becca said...

This is so strongly stated, and so true!

I especially like this~
"dreams that soared are now sour
weeds take over reason tenuously"

Well done!

polona said...

poignant and well done!

Ghost Particle said...

the greatness of human spirit is never to give up. Scared, and the ultimate sacrifice carries on the ideology of a future society. That we shall move forward to dream more and achieve more, and fight of more enemies of the mind.

Mimi Lenox said...

Just visiting peace globe bloggers tonight.
We will have another BlogBlast For Peace November 7, 2007. You are cordially invited to fly your peace globe and write a Dona Nobis Pacem post that day. Thank you for participating in the past. It will be a fantastic day in the blogosphere! Click here for the scoop and please spread the groovy peace vibe.
How To Get Your Peace Globe November 2007

Peace,
Mimi

Melody said...

Interesting concept and very clever of you!! Well done.

I'm here via Michele today, so hello from her and hello from me!!

Keshi said...

u r always great with ur verses!

Keshi.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I think it would be fun to be in that class! :)

Lila Dubois said...

"clamouring to get a hold, thriving
in the aftermath."

Beautiful.

Borut said...

Well said! These may not be the best of times?

Rhian / Crowwoman said...

Fabulous! This was deliciously profound:
"thorns of combat
pierce all but the one who started it"

Lisa Andel said...

Man if this isn't true.
Thanks.

Missy said...

An apt description of the times we live in and done without pointing fingers, very diplomatic. In my opinon this is a wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing.

Missy said...

Thanks for letting me know about the link to my blog. I forgot to capitalize the director name and that seems to be an important factor with my server. *shrugging shoulders*

The Incurable Disease of Writing

Square1 said...

Poignant! Piercing! And wonderfully composed. Thank you for sharing!

STAK said...

weeds among reason..........no better way to say it.....well stated and bravo!......

R.G. ALEXANDER said...

So true. So painful. Gorgeous!!

Tammy said...

Wonderful! Thank you for your comment. :) Trip is up but I'm still sick...argh!

Ann said...

WOnderful poem. Interesting concept, that class sounds very interesting.

Amy Ruttan said...

Wonderful Poem! Well put, well done!

Lahari Chatterji said...

Each line is equally beautiful and meaningful.

Melody said...

This is wonderful, Gautami! So true!

Danika / OpenChannel said...

Hey, thanks for introducing me to Cafe Writing - what a great idea! I love writing prompts, experimental forms, etc.

I love the sounds in these lines:

"listen to the world gone shallow
spirit is hunted as well haunted

dreams that soared are now sour"

Nancy said...

This is very powerful! I really like these lines:

pierce all but the one who started it closing his eyes, he refuses to budge.

I wish this wasn't so true!