Sunday, January 20, 2008

bottled---Read Write Poem/Monday Poetry Train

twittering words scattered like specked dust
still have that capacity to pierce.
maybe to touch too in ways no one envisaged-
grains of rice glued together;
taking apart scatters, rendering it meaningless.
one heart can read another if they are in harmony,
in our case, we depart from norm. suspend it
in timeless space…my prose or poetry
as you deem fit with your narrowed vision.
not that it makes any iota of difference
if you shelved those into a corner.

“I will bottle it all, throw it into vast ocean”

From Read Write Poem prompt: meta-whatsits? I took the following and wrote the above piece.

A Gift by Amy Lowell


SEE! I give myself to you, Beloved!
My words are little jars
For you to take and put upon a shelf.
Their shapes are quaint and beautiful,
And they have many pleasant colors and lustres
To recommend them.
Also the scent from them fills the room
With sweetness of flowers and crushed grasses.
When I shall have given you the last one
You will have the whole of me,
But I shall be dead.

Do not forget to ride the train...

13 comments:

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

LOVE those first two lines, Gautami! Man, those are strong.

I've got some Roadie Poet ready to roll later tonight (my time) on the Train.

Kai C. said...

this is so elegant.

scrappintwinmom said...

All I can say is - wow.
Oh, and Michele sent me.

julia said...

'twittering words scattered like specked dust
still have that capacity to pierce.'

Great opening. Thanks for including the poem by Amy Lowell, which is an intriguing look into your process.

Missy said...

"suspend it
in timeless space…my prose or poetry
as you deem fit with your narrowed vision."

I sense more is being referred to than just written word. I love this poem.

Joy Renee said...

'taking apart scatters, rendering it meaningless'

that expresses so well the effect of treating the language of the heart like a mathematical equation.

i just love the imagery in this

Crafty Green Poet said...

this flows nicely

paisley said...

i definitely follow missy's lead on focusing on this line....

"suspend it
in timeless space…my prose or poetry
as you deem fit with your narrowed vision."

it describes the blank stare i get from so many that read my work....and i am then left wondering,, what it is that makes them up,, if it cannot be reached....

~Easy said...

Hi. Michele sent me

mariacristina said...

I like the comparison of grains of rice to the meaning of words:

grains of rice glued together;
taking apart scatters, rendering it meaningless.

...deb said...

I loved the grains of rice, too. Such a unique vision, that.

...deb said...

You will love this week's RWP prompt!

SB said...

I read this, and I feel pain.