Thursday, January 10, 2008

hungered-----Totally optional Prompt



However much I tried, I couldn't do this right. Even then I am posting a few American sentences taken together in a verse form.

my stomach rumbles at the sound of rice crispy packet being pulled apart
i gobble it up hungrily, crunchiness disappears into my hungry mouth
teeth grind it to a fine pulp, tongue savouring it as never before
funny noises in my belly stop suddenly to be taken over by digestive sounds
why do our very own natural bodily functions embarrass us no end?

27 comments:

floots said...

i don't have the answer - but you are right
(i will eat my lunch slowly and hope to digest it silently in case you are listening) :)

Pauline said...

this made me laugh out loud - how true, though we aren't embarrassed as children. The second graders I work with love body sounds!

Brian said...

Maybe it's the difference between men and women. :)

gautami tripathy said...

Pauline, as a teacher I can vouch for the fact that kids love any kind of body sounds. Once I found that they are havinf burping contests. This too from girls..!!

Alan said...

Cabbage or cauliflower? The rest of the story.:)

giggles said...

This gave me a giggle too! Why do people get embarrassed by it...because we've been taught to?

Peace Giggles

joe said...

Yeah, embarrassment is better than the way my students revel in such noises!

Michele sent me!

homo escapeons said...

American sentences?
The Queen's English not good enough for you? Please don't encourage those upstart Colonials and try to maintain the usage of BBC Proper at all times.

Your stomach makes noise because it is a monstrous, composting, factory that produces 3 liters of gastric acid every day.
gurgle gurgle...

Ash said...

Hi from Michele's! I loved the little diddy! As far as body sounds, I have a very " proper & together" daughter who loves to burp as loudly as possible! Maybe it is also generational!

sage said...

Thanks for the chuckle!

Jo said...

Well I'm 41 this year and still laugh out loud at body sounds, childish for sure.

Crafty Green Poet said...

its interesting to wonder why...

paisley said...

it reminds me of laying my head on someones stomach,, and hearing the sounds their digestive track is making,, sounds that cannot be heard across thin air,, but are so loud and distinct when the ear is to the belly.....

tumblewords said...

Ah, the sounds of 'us'!

panthergirl said...

Very funny, but as others have said... it happens somewhere between childhood and adulthood (for most of us. ;)

Here via michele today!

DG said...

Body sounds is a cultural thing, I guess....Arab tradition supposedly holds that one must chomp loudly(not like a lowly beggar eating at a corner) and burp audibly (to show appreciation for the hostess's cooking)!

Liked the lines:)

Carmi said...

I think you did it just fine: your well chosen words force the reader to think twice about eating - something we almost never do in these rushed modern times.

Our kids aren't embarrassed at all. They find these sounds to be very amusing. I want to be more like them!

Good to see you again, Gautami. I'm visiting from Michele's today, but I look forward to catching up on my own in the days to come. You've been busy over the holiday season!

Penelope Anne said...

I like it...very honest and real.
Thanks for popping by to read my entry.

Sara said...

Loved it! I don't understand why we are so embarressed by body sounds...where did we get that from. Kids aren't. We weren't born that way...and I'm noticing that really old people don't notice it either...

Christy said...

very good question

enjoyed!

...deb said...

We are afraid of all our human sounds. Charming compilation!

Clare said...

Hi Gautami! I giggled while reading this and I can totally relate to it! I love the way you described your hunger and how you ate -- and of course the wonderful noises the body makes! This was fun reading, Gautami!
:)

polona said...

that's funny and i think the embarrassement is formed somewhere along the way to adulthood.
animals have no such problems

Linda said...

I can hear that Rice Krispies packet being opened! Nice and cracklely!

Ivory Sang Ah said...

it made me laugh when i was reading this. Wow, you pulled it off really well. You just gotta take a big , crunchy bite off of that rice crispies. wow, its rumbling now. what a coincidence:)

SB said...

"However much I tried, I couldn't do this right."

What? What what what...?!

< fart >

Bonnie Jacobs said...

Where in all your prompts is the one that will help you to continue the collective story with the Shameless Lions Writing Circle?