Wednesday, January 16, 2008

Symbols-------3WW



Awkward
Kitchen
Obsessed

His birthday. A non-existent one, if it ever was

Throughout the day, his movements had been awkward
Nonetheless, his father had not noticed
He never did. They seldom exchanged any words
He did not even remember why he had stopped talking to his old man
Lately he had been having strange dreams
Cats, eagles, fishes, mythical dragons too
Fine sheen of dust mixed with spotless snow
Sticking like fish scales on walls of his inner mind
He was obsessed with it, this need to escape

Sliding the kitchen knife into his socks, just in case
Picked up is his backpack; he sneaked out in the dark.
Pulling on jacket closer, he kicked at the pebbles on the way

He was not much surprised when a black tomcat said,

“What took you so long?”

23 comments:

Sherry said...

This is fantastic...you used these words in a way I would not have thought!!!

Truefaith1963 said...

wow - I love it!
(I'm a dreamer too) Very surreal - where did that come from? Could be the decongestants I'm taking, but I swear that cat was talking!!
As last week, I can't leave a link in Wordpress - I think its this PC at work (thanks ul for the tip)

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Love the ending! This would be great as a story or even a book. I think you've found the path on this one Gautami.

((((((hugs)))))

Rose

xo

Richard said...

Tami! Terrific! I hope we get to see where this goes.

puresunshine said...

Powerful words gautami. Loved the ending! :)

This Girl Remembers said...

I am astounded by this piece - there is so, so much in there that I had to read it over several times, enjoying it more each time. Wonderful!

ThomG said...

I love the nonsensical nature of this; not that it is silly but that it is fun. Way fun.

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

MORE! PLEASE. I am really curious where you would take this....

mariacristina said...

Cool! sounds like an Alice in Wonderland adventure. I like this, gautami.

Tammy said...

This left me wanting more. Nice prose.

tumblewords said...

And then? And then? This is great!

Heather Kathleen said...

this gave me chills! so beautifully descriptive and dark. i loved it.

paisley said...

very nicely done.... i hope he never meets up with "just in case....."

dsnake1 said...

dark and surreal. love it!

sure it's not the cheshire cat? :)

susan said...

I swore I commented to this yesterday. Is there a blog gremlin? lol Enjoyed this.

By the way, I responded to your query at BES. Thanks for reading and commenting.

A Tag Along Traveler said...

this was great!!! I loved it!

Sandy said...

I loved your story...I believe many of us are obsessed with the need to escape.

S

Mock Haiku [Sandy] said...

I forgot to click my nickname...[blushing]. Thanks for the link and you are getting one in return.

S

Christy said...

An enjoyable read, leaves one wanting to read on further into the story

TC said...

Very interesting. I was engrossed, trying to figure out what was going to happen.

LittleWing said...

lots there...the ending was beautiful...young lad on a journey...

etcetera said...

Thanks for visiting wordsetcetera. I love this poem, especially the ending. Very visual.

pia said...

Yes I know the need to escape :)
Love the ending