Sunday, October 19, 2008

dilemma

Here I offer two short verses, both different from my style!:

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
you ask to follow me?

never! ending this
unhealthy liason now

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

in the abyss of darkness
where black holes absorb
all that they can, he got lost-
momentarily
blinded by it

yet he senses it has to end
nothing ever is never ending

42 comments:

Beth P. said...

Yeah!

I love this poem!

Thanks for the delight and the smile of recognition. Yes, that is how it happens. Between words, between breaths, you know!

Thank you for the great prompt.

Edward S Gault said...

Thank You for an excellent Prompt!
Theses vereses are excellent, I can relate to both very well.

Art and Poetry said...

I agree they are both very nice! but I like the second one best.

- A - C - said...

very nice verses indeed.
"nothing ever is never ending"... how I love this one!

keithsramblings said...

You are full of surprises! Not your style at all, but brilliant nonetheless.

Mandy said...

Neat neologistics.

anthonynorth said...

Nicely done. Shame they had to end.

spacedlaw said...

I like that second one!
Thank you for the prompt.

Jeeves said...

Really nice one. The first one.

SandyCarlson said...

To be lost temporarily in a black hole is an intense idea. I feel the crushing pressure of all and nothing at once!

Deborah Godin said...

All kinds of interesting interpretations in this one. Well done!

Tammy said...

Maybe not your style but I enjoyed them both. :)

Linda Jacobs said...

You never fail to surpise and amaze me! These are both short but deep!

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Hi Gautami, these are very different.

A nice twist to the prompt!

barbs.haiku said...

An interesting hypotheses, but has anything ever come out from within a black hole? At least yet?

zoya gautam said...

..thank u for a very interesting prompt and equally interesting interpretations..

Geraldine said...

Great prompt Gautami, thank you.

I love your interpretations of it here. Well done!

www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

Bill said...

waking
from a dream
the sudden darkness

Pam said...

Thanks for the prompt this week. I really like the second poem-- very nice.

Quiet Paths said...

Thanks for your great prompt this week. I was surprised at your offering - I loved it.

qualcosa di bello said...

thank you for the prompt this week...i like your twist on this, particularly the idea that 'nothing is never ending'

teric said...

Your prompt and haiku was just wonderful. As is this one.

sage said...

I like the second one

mgirl said...

I like that, "nothing is ever never ending." Thank you.

Danika / OpenChannel said...

Hi Guatami!

I just came by to check out some of your entries from the past several weeks. I learned a new word from you "tatterdemalion" - that's a great word!

I haven't been around, I've been working too hard. Is there no more Monday Poetry Train?

DeLi said...

so witty especially the first

Rob Kistner said...

I so love the sparse nature of these two pieces Gautami -- especially the second piece. Powerfully minimal, yet it immerses you instantly and deeply in its rich essence.

"nothing ever is never ending" the mantra of the material world... ;)

DONN COPPENS said...

I'm still perplexed as to why they took the N out of DilemNa...
how rude!

tumblewords said...

These are great - zen and wise!

Borut said...

Enjoyed. Black-holistic!:)

Stan Ski said...

Wanting an end to things that will inevitably end anyway - perhaps the sentiment of wishing for 'forever' will last forever.

Whitesnake said...

As Usual I didnt understand a bloody thing!

Lion Chiller said...

liked your poems...

Patois said...

Love the prompt, and your excellent twist on the take. Your second poem is marvelous as well.

Sara from Poets Who Blog said...

Your work is always intriguing to me.

Today I am stopping in from Writer's Island.

I enjoyed both poems but I really found myself drawn to the last line in the second one. It makes me think.

Devika said...

Liked these two too, Gautami!
wishes!
devika

Art and Poetry said...

Thanks for your kind comment on my blog! and it is nice to known that you care and teach these children.
It is also nice what you said about India I have found that many of the best blogs are run by people in India. My father was in India before independence.

Ghost Particle said...

excellent! short verses always have bigger impacts. I loved them.

polona said...

powerful verses...

venus66 said...

Something very different from you. Nice one.

cyclopseven said...
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cyclopseven said...

If there is a beginning, an ending is definitely somewhere out there. The law of life is polarity. Otherwise existence is but void.