Sunday, January 25, 2009

if only-----

If only I had time
to write a novel-
now I just write haiku

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rabbit looks
askance-
I stop suddenly

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tractor leaves tracks
wheat boughs sway
are they dancing?

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cut to stump
tree sheds tears
in cold breeze

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peanut will sprout
anywhere
it only needs a will

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sestina-
thirty nine lines?
prefer haikuing

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If only I had time
to read you-
now I just feel you

27 comments:

zoya gautam said...

.."rabbit looks
askance-
I stop suddenly"..
really liked this..
thanks for sharing these..

anthonynorth said...

From the whimsical to the sublime. Excellent.

Greyscale Territory said...

Love how you have captured the spirit of passing thoughts! A real sense of passing time with quite a sensitive twist at the end! Delightful!

SandyCarlson said...

All of these are thrilling. How a rabbit can make me stop, too. The power of silent gentleness, perhaps?

"If only I had time to read you" stuns me. It's wonderful.

Thanks.

venus66 said...

You write haiku too well. Nice to read them. Thank you for sharing.

WillThink4Wine said...

These are wonderful, and I just love the last!

Haiku Tuna said...

I'll be the first to give love to the peanut verse! loved that but the last one touched me very deeply too.

Noah the Great said...

These leave much to think about. When I worked full time and schooled full time I wrote a novel.

Just try and you will most likely do.

Amias said...

"If only I had time
to read you-
now I just feel you"

enjoyed the read, but I am feeling you on the ending.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Ahh, time. How many times a day do I wish for more of it?

Deborah Godin said...

That last one stopped me even more surely than a rabbit! Beautiful!

Quiet Paths said...

Each of these speak of much. Couldn't choose a favorite!

alotus-poetry said...

I love how you wrapped up the poem to reflect the first senryu. It was delightful. :)

I love the "sestina" one too, as I can feel your "pain/frustration" of sestinas. I'm just terrible with form poetry. Maybe one of these days when I'm out of school and find more time, I'll attempt again.

Gautami, thank you sincerely for visiting my poetry site. I now have the time to return the visit, and I do apologize for getting back to you at a late time! My apologies.

Anyway, I so do enjoyed this set of haiku/senryu. :)

Art and Poetry said...

It is time we all need,
Nice original post!

Julia Smith said...

Your first one and your last one are my favorites. I can relate to both.

sue said...

We should all be like the lowly peanut:
"peanut will sprout
anywhere
it only needs a will"
!

Bill said...

JUST write haiku? ; )

Keep it up, gautami.

Tumblewords: said...

Keep haiku-ing and before long you'll have a novel - this is a lovely set of wonder, wisdom and wish.

Maggie said...

This is a feeling reading.

Beth P. said...

gautami--

these were all sweet and pungent--like...cardamom, i think--

liked the last one best!

thank you!

Bone said...

A couple of those were really funny, Gautami. The first one and the sestina one had me smiling really big today at work :)

qualcosa di bello said...

honestly, there is nothing "just" about your haiku...it is wonderful! (though i am sure i would be just as captured by a novel by you as well!)

Tammy said...

These were excellent Tami! Sestina made me chuckle. lol XXOOO

one more believer said...

as if laying on one's back, surrounded by green grass, reading the shapes of clouds, talking outloud... i wonder when love blossoms we stop reading and just feel our way through... a most enjoyable day...

Regina Marie said...

This is beautiful. I enjoy the connection you made with the earth-

haikuexpeditions said...

nice series.
keep it going.
minimalist with lot of depth.

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Sanjay

Beloved Dreamer said...

Tami, how truly sad and beautiful.
Your words "If only I had time
to read you-
now I just feel you" speak volumes about your soul.
Well done my friend.

love,Melamie-bd