Wednesday, February 25, 2009

short verses

persistent voices
interfere with my thoughts
with callous regard

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comb persistantly
interfere my hair's natural waves
pulling it callously
I TUG WITH FRUSTRATION
pulling it callously
natural wavy hair persistently
interfere combing

15 comments:

!nversed Poignancy! said...

Ah!, Lovely!..
Loved the way you've binded the two discrete events into one..
True dexterity!.
Good One!

Lorraine said...

Hey, that's my hair lol good one ;)

ThomG said...

The first is just delightful, while the second is a hoot.

SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

Love these Gautami! I wish I had hair long enough to pull!

SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

I like the way you weaved the three words into the NaisaiKu..

Many thanks for taking The NaisaiKu.. Challenge! again this week.

ande said...

My daughter has that hair. No conditioner can tame it-but we love those wild waves!

polona said...

i can feel the frustration ... well done with both verses

quin browne said...

lovely.

- A - C - said...

:D I like the first one so much.. it captures everyday life exquisitely.
Well well Gautami.. after all you're a master in the art.

see ya!
A.

anthonynorth said...

Two excellent shorts there - especially the first.

Amarettogirl said...

aaahhh, I haven't been around these parts in quite a while sos sososo good to be back around here! These responses are brilliant and witty! Smart use of the words that I would have never thought of! mine is called Dose of Reality I hope you like it:)

Tumblewords: said...

Well done! Love your take on the prompt words...

susan said...

I just finished, Sadika's way. There's a passage about unruly, wavy hair. Thought it reading your post. Thanks.

A Splitting Headache

Fledgling Poet said...

I can definitely relate to the one about hair! And the first one flowed so smoothly...

captainmolecule said...

very interesting :-)