Friday, April 03, 2009

chaotic

heart lodged in my throat
I try to spit it out-
it refuses to go either way

dried-up thoughts
crackle loudly within my head-
fully charging it up

lost my grip
on the things I handled
too well-
will summer breeze
bring it all back?

19 comments:

dreamscapes said...

sure it will..
very nice

- A - C - said...

you won't have to wait long to see...

Seachanges said...

loosing grips - ah all the time! It'll be summer soon!

Whitesnake said...

Interesting way of putting it!

Robin Konarz said...

Gautami, I like this. I can feel the "dried-up thoughts crackle loudly within my head."

Janice Thomson said...

Oh! Love those first lines - what an emotion it gives.

Wayne Pitchko said...

nice words as usual and I agree...great first lines

Danielle Mari said...

I especially love that first stanza! Startling imagery.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

"will summer breeze
bring it all back?"
I think so.
That's what I'm waiting for. :)

cyclopseven said...

Hope summer breeze will lighten things as it sweep by.

Lorraine said...

Our chaotic thoughts, how well you put it, love this ma petite :)

claire said...

Lovely, Gautami. :D

Gavin said...

I like the sound of "crackle loudly within my head". I'm joining napowrimo, am a bit nervous!

Vasilly said...

I love this!

WriteUp Cafe said...

"heart lodged in my throat
I try to spit it out-
it refuses to go either way"

nicely said..

Ms Ulat Buku said...

This is good. Wish I could write like you.

Dorte H said...

What a fine poem!

Kerrie said...

I like it Gautami

Tasses said...

I like the edginess quietly lurking within the simplicity :-)