Tuesday, April 07, 2009

Ghostly past

sepia-tinted photo
of me swaying in a swing-
AM I A GHOST?
swing sways creakingly
colour replaces sepia

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11 comments:

Deborah Godin said...

Wow, I really LOVE this one! I have to say it's one of my favorites by you (or anybody). The naisaiku format is particularly good for the subject, don't you think? I really like how you weave the element of time back and forth over the central ghost image. Wonderful!

SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

Lovely words Gautami, this really takes me there - love the way you question, Am I a Ghost?

!nversed Poignancy! said...

Ah..Lovely. Loved the tweak; It really doth provide the thump to the write..:)

Kai C. said...

how have you been doing? long time no see..
hope you are well...

Janice Thomson said...

Gosh this is good!

sage said...

nicely done--the poem worked well in this pattern

zoya gautam said...

"AM I A GHOST?"~
-without access to to material facts even the sanctified courts of law would not find it easy to answer that question-(gutsy introspection nonetheless)
as for me,i am happy to read ur writings without being 'judgemental'_
but then one does always revere ' The Holy Ghost '..thanks for sharing this..

anthonynorth said...

Interesting take.

Pretty Me!! said...

wonderful !! one of the best i have read on your blog !! (coz i dnt understand many ;) )

dreamscapes said...

wow.. nice one :)

songofsea said...

woah i liked this a lot!
Was picturing myself.....