Monday, June 15, 2009

spooky does it..


he arrived dead tired into the farm-

stopped at the stables, tended the horses
his own soothing words made him fall asleep
in his waking dreamy state he saw
a lantern light from deeper in the barn
shone on a man and woman in the door-

step, their raised voices got to him
he rose and walked towards them

he stumbled on a weed and fell on the door
when he got inside the room to see more
like two kids they were lying on the floor
having fistfights over an stupid apple core

18 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Well that certainly wasn't the ending I was expecting :-)

Jeeves said...

Hahaa. Enjoyed this one

Julia Smith said...

This is almost lighthearted!

jabblog said...

Very good- a nice twist.

sage said...

i like the way you mix up styles, you're always good with surprises.

Just someone said...

Budding poet

Michelle Johnson said...

Having lived on a farm I enjoyed reading this one very much. Great twist at the end. Hope all is well.

Linda Jacobs said...

Too funny! I like the rhyming at the end!

Marja said...

Great work with a nice surprise It is not always as we think it is

sam said...

O.O This is certainly interesting. :) Thanks for your comments over at my blog :)

Andy Sewina said...

Love the ending!

Missy said...

Nice.

quin browne said...

made me smile.

cyclopseven said...

an ending with fistfights..:) I like that.

Selma said...

Those pesky kids. Good one!

Pam said...

This is an enjoyable read. I like that you completely changed the form and voice in the last stanza by using rhyme.

lissa said...

unexpected ending but I like the build-up

AD said...

awesome :D LOVE IT! :D

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