Wednesday, August 19, 2009

GRACEFUL WAS NO LONGER IN FASHION

that tattoo was a riot
numbers inscribed in its midst
spoke of decay of a bygone era
GRACEFUL WAS NO LONGER IN FASHION
bygone era gave way to a decayed one
numbers danced with glee
rioting in that tattoo art

20 comments:

anthonynorth said...

This makes the little shark on my arm so lame :-)
Nicely done.

Andy Sewina said...

I hope those numbers weren't six six six!

<3

Wendy Naisa said...

Dead good!
Thanks for taking The NaiSaiKu Challenge? this week!!
-Andy Sewina

Janet Jarrell said...

Well done.
This reminds me of the new fashion I am seeing people wear on thier bodies...it is a barcode tatoo - scan that one!

Mark said...

Very clever!

Nicely done.

Missy said...

There's so much life within a tattoo! Loved how you used your words here.

ThomG said...

You've created a nifty NaiSaiKu Challenge piece full of wit and wisdom.

Seher said...

really?
it is no longer in fashion :)

http://1goal1passion.blogspot.com/2009/08/three-words-only.html

sarah haliwell said...

clever use of words :-)

sage said...

well down, I like how you structured the poem.

Tumblewords: said...

Great way to use the form and the prompt words - it's a fine, fine read!

asleeponmyfeet said...

Lovely piece!

Stan Ski said...

That's some tattoo!

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Tattoos leave a history...I loved your take on this prompt.

Bobbie Sandlin said...

Great writing, and so fun to read! LMAO @ at Andy's 666 comment

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Cleverly done! Whatever one's opinion of tattoos, there's no doubt we've lost a lot of the grace of prior eras.

Jeeves said...

Nice, nice and very true

Just someone said...

Good one :)

tatoo was a riot - is great!

pjd said...

I have to admit I'm not at all sure what the numbers refer to. When I think of tattooed numbers, the image of Nazi concentration camps comes to mind, but I don't believe that's what you were talking about...

April Lindfors said...

Great write. It makes me think possibly the tattoo has the year stamped in there somewhere, someone's memento of whatever bygone era you speak of. Very descriptive, yet leaves much to the imagination.

A graceful stride across the parking lot