Sunday, January 17, 2010

convulsions cause chaos










studiously she avoids gazing in that direction
where he sits nonchalant, almost uncaring-
minds send out signals; silence so chilling,
picking up vibrations, she answers the question

being very still, with almost no expression,
she slowly stands with her eyes measuring
the distance, she glides toward his beckoning
mind. her heart beat, was by any indication

making her state, an object of ardent desire;
visible in her stance, in her jerky mannerisms.
smoldering flame, blazing; intense, luminous

pulling him in too; each bursting vein on fire
blowing apart their semblance, volumes
of convulsions still unseen, causing chaos

19 comments:

Beth P. said...

Now there's some chaos I could get down with!

Thanks, Gautami for the foreplay...

spacedlaw said...

A most sparkly relationship!

anthonynorth said...

Chaos certainly gets in the way sometimes.

Amity said...

it's like you feel comfortable yet there is still chaos-inhibitions...:)

i like the poem Gautami...:)

keep up!

Lorraine said...

Bliss and passion, do not mix like bread and butter, love how you say it ;)

The Dark Lord said...

Brilliant take on the prompt.. You portray the emotions very strongly. A powerful work.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Sizzling with chaotic passion! Lovely read.

Andy Sewina said...

Don't you just love Chaos!

<3

Sue said...

emotional chaos -- but just like in science, an underlying pattern.

Jill said...

This really touch me since I'm kind of in that situation right now...

Julia Smith said...

I love the sense of overwhelming, silent attraction toward one another.

Tumblewords: said...

Sparks flying, for sure!

Loch Rob said...

And such is the flame of desire, especially when acceptance is unknown. Should I, or shouldn't I. Sometime you have to just open yourself to the possibility of disappointment and take the risk. Nice lead up to the chaos!

Yousei Hime said...

Love the movement from illusionary control to chaos of passion. Thank you for sharing this.

one more believer said...

luv the idea of nonverbal conversations exchanged....

Stan Ski said...

If you try to hold your breath as you read, you can't get to the end of the sentence, but it kind of adds an exaggerated sense of chaos to the piece, which I thought was brilliant...

gabrielle said...

i felt the chaos in her indecision unbearable. i'm glad she chose passion over constraint. You create a beautiful gathering storm.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Oh Tami, that's hot hot hot. Very powerful. well done.



Melanie

SandyCarlson said...

Ardent, honest, real, beautiful. My kind of chaos, to be sure.