Saturday, March 13, 2010

a curse or a plea

wherever you move
going this way
or that
the murmur of my sorrow
will haunt you

in your mirror
you will see only me
my smiling facade
turned into its own shadow
will haunt you

I was never there
I will never be there
yet I held a place for a while
in your mind, which
will haunt you

consider it a curse,
or a plea,
I will continue to haunt you

22 comments:

quid said...

The pain and sorrow come out so clearly in your words.

Beautiful, heartbreaking.

quid

J Cosmo Newbery said...

No wonder I don't like shaving in the morning.

rob kistner said...

Persistent and taunting -- well written Gautami...
...rob

Here is my murmur...

anthonynorth said...

An excellent chill to this one.

adreamygal said...

thats painfully beautiful !!!

iamyuva said...

i resist..

Loch Rob said...

A lot of pain and sorrow in this one. It appears he thought you were there, and yet all along you were not. Intriguing. Maybe time (and another) heal wounds of the heart.

SandyCarlson said...

So it goes. I have been haunted in this way. You paint an amazing picture here.

Leo said...

yes... this is a sad murmur today.. loved it though.. good one!

Cynthia said...

powerful. almost like a obssesive
love potion. written very real.

Maggie said...

There might not have been too much of a place in the life but I see you left strong footprints in the mind...well done :)

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swapnap said...

silently powerful...it haunts you.

Robin said...

Very powerful...and haunting. I find the last line--consider it a curse, or a plea--intriguing. Well done!

Stan Ski said...

Continue to haunt this space with your words.

Mojo said...

a hauntingly familiar song. or curse. I suspect most of us have a similar ghost. such is the nature of love and loss.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

So much emotion and angst in this poem...you captured that sorrowful feeling beautifully.

Aayushi Mehta said...

We all feel like that sometimes...hurt, and angry!! but you've portrayed the emotions very well...

Marinela said...

An amazing work here, very well done :)

Tumblewords: said...

Perpetual murmuring - and yes, it is haunting.

sashi said...

I can so relate to this its scary! Beautifully written

Glennis said...

well said.

gabrielle said...

ghosts can be so fluid.