Sunday, October 10, 2010

Haibun: death vibes

Was she dead? It did not matter, if she was. More important, was he dead? Her eyes opened for a sec.

death vibes-
she sent those to him,
he, blemish to society

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Why don't you try something in 160 characters? Space included!

28 comments:

Deborah said...

Oooh there's a lot in that 160, well done!

Strummed Words said...

I can understand about "death vibes." Nice haibun.

My first Sunday 160: Sunday 160

Brian Miller said...

dang...you say much in your 160...and set just the tone...great job!

Alice Audrey said...

"If looks could kill."

Interesting 160.

My 160 is here.

PattiKen said...

very powerful Alice said it best. "If looks could kill..."

liv2write2day said...

Death vibes...Amazing imagery.

Jingle said...

160 Haiku,
very smart one!

Teresa said...

Very powerful 160!

Nalini Hebbar said...

deep!...can anyone be that bad?

Jingle said...

thanks for linking !

dasuntoucha said...

Death vibes indeed...nicely done.

Amanda said...

Very powerful words my friend xx Thanks for linking with Potluck xx

Shashi said...

Very beautiful... Liked it so much and I think I will try this type some time soon.. and will let you know...

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fiveloaf said...

wow!

Amity said...

death vibes? she must be a sorcerer? wanting to phase-out those societal ills...

very nice haibun? is it?

thanks for taking part in my prompt this week...your served a challenging verse worth thinking!

sillyfrogsusan said...

Amazed by the likeness in message to mine.
http://sillyfrogsusan.wordpress.com/2010/10/11/forensic-feelings/ ‎
Yours holds even more power in fewer words:-)

kathew said...

ouch! death vibes. I'll be good!
great post.

TALON said...

Wow! This packs a lot of meaning in a few words!

Gemma @ Greyscale said...

There is a distinct projection of a curse on the wind! Quite intimidating! Very clever use of powerful words!

Monkey Man said...

Great 160. Thanks so much for playing. Love this.

umapoems said...

dead vibes?interesting..nice 160

wiserskydiver said...

160 degrees turn :D
nicely done
Cheers!!!

ladynimue said...

too good !! :)

JamieDedes said...

Wow! 160 that packs a punch. Well done...

Stranger said...

WOW! death vibes. Powerful stuff.

cesargealogo said...

Short yet powerful.

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Jingle said...

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