Wednesday, March 02, 2011

cut a lemon into half


you stuck that fork into a lemon
I can't look at it now
you made the sourness disappear
I don't have affinity for bitterness
what do you carry in your satchel
you fidget when I ask for it
I will not mention it again
if you share that glass with me

"whose blood came out of lemon,
or is it only reddened tears?"

19 comments:

jaerose said...

Sweet, bitter and a wonderful slice of darkness on the side..Jae

anthonynorth said...

A great take on the pic.

Ramesh Sood said...

When heart bleeds, tears are red.. I loved where you reached..

Linda Jacobs said...

Oooh, great ending! And that first line is intriguing! I'm still thinking about it.

Deborah said...

Ooh very well done!

ladynimue said...

you dish dark words with perfect bitterness ..

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

Sheilagh Lee said: dark and delicious!wonderfully written

Helen said...

Sharing that glass ~ solves so much.

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Very mysterious... I like it!

Tumblewords: said...

reddened tears - interesting thought. Nice piece!

Trellissimo said...

Mudering a lemon? Hmm... different!

barbara said...

Love the ending. Makes me think it would make a wonderfully surreal country song.

Old Altonian said...

Very good use of the prompts within a highly readable and enjoyable poem.

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

beautiful.

Kavita said...

Ooohh...deliciously dark..and so full of suspense... and both these criteria are every high on my list! :)

A great read, Gautami!
I wonder if that glass was ever shared...

Trulyfool said...

Gautami,

I myself would have shared the glass.

(Perhaps it's a hybrid: a 'blood-lemon'?)

Trulyfool

RNSANE said...

Well done but, of course, you've left me full of questions...what was in the satchel...did he share the glass with you.

Mine is at:

http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/03/magpie-tales-55-its-not-nice-to-eat.html#links

By the way, I watched the movie,
"No One Killed Jessica" last night
( I love Indian films ). Very sad.

sharplittlepencil said...

Gautami, I did not see this one coming out of those prompt words. The image alone was startling enough, but the idea of the bleeding lemon (heart), the bitterness as physical and spiritual... great! So glad you took on this prompt.

Amy

ThomG said...

so packed with emotion.