Tuesday, March 29, 2011

musty scents will set me free





















I look at you both-
entwined in the throes of love,
musty scents of which reaches out to me.
I envy you, your freedom-
your free spirits mingled with each other.
oblivious of my staring,
you are lost in the vast space of each other.
each of your pores incite me
but I am trapped in my smile.

"maestro made me a legend,
giving me glass eyes"

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Mona Lisa by Da Vinci does not need any introduction. Her smile has fascinated many, and few cynics think of it as fake. But everyone has some kind of reaction after looking at the painting, her smile. I think of her as a trapped soul. This is a raw work, needs to be edited. I will eventually get around that.

23 comments:

Mama Zen said...

What a cool perspective!

Ramesh Sood said...

What a write...Gautami..you added to the enchanting smile..

Donna B said...

Very interesting slant...great job.

Andy said...

Very interesting take...her smile is indeed a topic for conversation

Diana Lee said...

I agree, what a fantastic perspective you present. Well done.

flaubert said...

Gautami, nicely done to the prompts and I love the ending.

Pamela

marousia said...

Nicely done with a superb ending

Judy Roney said...

This is a surprise poem. I am impressed that you put two difficult prompts together like this.

http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/03/musty-minutes.html

Brian Miller said...

each of your pores excite me...wow...thats intense...smiles.

lightverse said...

Wow! You really did a superb job with the prompts! I love the way you look at things from different perspectives!

hpicasso said...

if eyes could talk...oh wait, they just did

Peace, hp

http://hpicasso.blogspot.com/2010/10/just-words.html

Mike Patrick said...

The power of a prompt: to use a perspective from within a painting. There is a voyeuristic horror story lurking in there somewhere. Marvelous.

vivinfrance said...

You are showing us a different side of you, Gautami, and I find it moving. Thank you.

Trulyfool said...

Gautami,

The M.L. as an onlooker! Interesting take.

Trulyfool

versebender said...

Well...Mona Lisa as a voyeur. This was quite clever! Vb

Steve Isaak said...

Excellent take on the subject. Distinctive.

thingy said...

I love the way you turned it around. I'm am looking through her eyes.

A terrificly perspective piece, Gautami.

Rachel Hoyt said...

Ooooooooohh. I love your point of view here!

Mary said...

a creative take on the We Write Poems prompt. I have never envied Mona Lisa though. To me, she always looks like she is hiding something not very pleasant.

Elaine said...

Nice, just nice!

Tumblewords: said...

I like the way you saw her...very nice!

Wayne Pitchko said...

really like where you went here.....very nice Gautami

Luke Prater said...

excellent. I always enjoy a poet who knows how to get to the essence of what they are wanting to express and convey it with clarity and word-economy. Bravo

Kind regards

Luke @ WordSalad