Wednesday, May 11, 2011

add some more

I brandish my own lines
(those patches don't match)
I strike a few
add some more
the page looks like battlefield
yet no one is killed
only words seem to lay low
but I forbid their demise
they can only rejuvenate
and I can still manage to ask,
why a cento, and not a canto?

"sticky patches never did any of us any good"

20 comments:

Kim Nelson said...

Forms are so demanding, but you did it! And you also managed to convey some relevant feelings we writer's often have about our work. Nicely done.

Patchwork poetry and Parenting said...

Enjoyed the poem...reminded me of what it feels like at times in the writing process :>)

jaerose said...

Lines and words..such a battle..especially the more you use them..i also thought of lines on a face and furrowed brows trying to say things 'just right'..Jae

honeyhaiku said...

Wonderfully written. The process of the writer/poet.

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

Forms are indeed demanding...even the cento, which has not particular meter or rhyme scheme but yet has its own limitations...but the pain is worth it. But you pose an interesting question. Why not a canto?

Well done.

-Nicole

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

well done I love how you got all of the prompts in and talked about types of poetry.

flaubert said...

Gautami, love this poem, what not a canto?

Pamela

Andy Sewina said...

I love the idea of rejuvenating words!

<3

here's something for you!

beespoetry said...

Oops, I meant to say battlefield. You know what I mean.

beespoetry said...

:) Yeah, editing can definitely be a minefield.
I had a hard time with this poem, but she's done! A year later, but still. http://beespoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/07/thoughts-on-the-shore-of-balsam-lake/

barbara said...

Really enjoyed this. fun, and true.
Love the bit about words laying low. I know that far too well.

oldegg said...

What a clever way to write poetry. Was it as hard to compose as it would seem?

Laurie Kolp said...

"the page looks like battlefield
yet no one is killed"-- priceless!

vivinfrance said...

Great fun. I have many battlefield pages.

tasmith1122 said...

Very, very clever. I enjoyed this. :)

Ralf Bröker said...

Fine poem playing with words and its double meanings.

Best wishes
Ralf

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

Actually, that is a good question...maybe a good place for further exploration (the canto, that is). And I know when I start crossing out lines to form my centos, it starts to look a bit messy....but no casualties.

Nice job.

--Nicole

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

Actually, that is a good question...maybe a good place for further exploration (the canto, that is). And I know when I start crossing out lines to form my centos, it starts to look a bit messy....but no casualties.

Nice job.

--Nicole

Mr. Walker said...

It does look like a battlefield sometimes "yet no one is killed" - I like that - and that you "forbid their demise" - playful and fun, but with some deeper ideas as well. Enjoyed this!

Richard

Andy said...

I'm smiling at this poem...my sheets of paper usually look like how you describe. Sometimes, I can't even read my own writing.

Great job!