Wednesday, June 15, 2011

whispering ocean

















trapped in it
whispers of air
prefer to stay put
rivulets of thready thought
grip me 
I want to escape
into the endless ocean

"isolated, I let strawberry tickle me
while storms breaks in within,
maybe I prefer to be within the stones of time"

21 comments:

Cynthia said...

I find your words soothing.

Ren said...

Very calming.
Lovely use of the prompts.

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Kim Nelson said...

Great result from combining the two prompts!
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/15/blessed-connection/

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

I love this it really calls us to the ocean.

Mad Kane said...

Sad and lovely.
Mad Kane

creativeintrospection said...

interesting take on sound and words. Like the way they played each other. Thank you for sharing it.

Old Altonian said...

Very good - one can smell the ozone and the sea-weed.

sage said...

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A Kwee Life said...

I love the endless ocean. Very lovely.

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Tess Kincaid said...

I love the little strawberry addendum. It conjures up strawberry ice cream in my mind.

Jingle said...

wish for the sea seeing,
wow.

you have captured the desire of a shell stuck on beach perfectly.
:)

the critics said...

wonderfully written :0

cj Schlottman said...

Ah, the powers of the oceans of the world. Beautifully stated.

Namaste..........cj

Sue said...

This has a lovely serenity to it.

=)

Dazee Dreamer said...

wow. that was beautiful

The Woodswoman said...

Being a water person, found this intrigingly lovely.

Jo said...

beautifully written

jeff campbell said...

Very nice ;-) Looking at that shell and reading your poem...sublime...Peace and blessings

Jenny said...

That picture was the perfect illustration for these lovely words.

The ebb and flow of your word crafting always pulls me in...

...and then releases me...

...and I am richer for having been priviledged to read your words.

Thank you.

A+

Nonna Beach said...

Simply gorgeous prose...Excellent..."rivulets of thready thought" Love that !!!