Tuesday, November 08, 2011

falling apart

when the sole of my shoe fell apart
I twisted my ankle
my knees gave away
I fell on the ground
my shin bone hurt
my elbows balanced my body
my cheeks pressed to the ground
I give away to tears
why when everything was going good
my shoe fell apart
taking me down
(serves me right)
I will not hitch a ride
I will muster my strength
from the wine I drank
in the late afternoon

"I want to call out, where are you 
but who cares?
I will sleep hugging the earth"

25 comments:

Jinksy said...

A philosophical outlook.♥

Kay L. Davies said...

Very well done. I can remember something like this happening when I used to wear heels and one came off. You've also reminded me I need to go shoe-shopping this week. I'm of an age now when falling is quite likely, so I only wear high-quality flat shoes with orthotic insoles and I'm down to just one pair, which is almost worn out.
Your writing is excellent.

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Brian Miller said...

oo very evocative..not just the fall but the desire to cry out in hopes maybe that someone hears...

Kathy Bischoping said...

I like the specificness of the poem's question, not "why" but "why NOW?", and the depiction of the stages in the downward crumple.

Kathy Bischoping said...

(P.S. I don't mean I enjoy the crumple! but how you depict it!)

Shashi said...

Its beautiful... I liked it a lot... Thanks for sharing..

Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html

Yousei Hime said...

That's rough. As the years pass, fear of helplessness increases for me. This captures just such a fear.

ayala said...

Waiting to be seen and heard, beautiful!

jaerose said...

The bottom of our shoes tell many stories..you have told this one beautifully as ever..Jae

Pat Hatt said...

I guess everything is connected to the shoe umm sole, great verse.

Nanka said...

You have done this well!!
I see the determination to get back on those feet ~
"taking me down
(serves me right)
I will not hitch a ride
I will muster my strength"
The last lines are sad when timely help is not coming forth!!

Wayne Pitchko said...

from the soul....nicely done and thanks for sharing

Sheilagh Lee said...

nicely done. those darn heels always trying to pull you down.

Berowne said...

Interesting use of the three words; thanks.

zumpoems.com said...

Good metaphor, nicely executed

Laurie Kolp said...

Perhaps a little too much wine?

oldegg said...

I loved the pace and pathos in this piece. Great work

nan said...

(serves me right) stayed with me and I went back to re-read. It makes me wonder when I fall, where have I gone wrong. Is hubris at the core of most falls? Thought-provoking.

Altonian said...

When you've gotta go (down) you gotta go!

Bone said...

I sure hope this wasn't a true story! If so, I hope you're OK :)

The Noiseless Cuckooclock said...

how amazing,
love the wording.

AfterTim said...

So much emotion evoked through a very common circumstance. Its not often we can embrace life situations in its entirety and learn lessons from them. You've captured something quite profound here, not something many can do in such simple words. Pleasure visiting your blog.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Life has a way of tripping you up when you least expect it.

Andy said...

Hello.
We will trip, stumble & fall, but our inner voice always compels us to pick ourselves up & keep on moving.

You expressed this very well.
Thanks for sharing, Gautami.

Imaginary Dreams

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Well described and fun to read.