Sunday, January 01, 2012

drifting words

I put the final stitches to that patch
yarn was coming apart
my plum sweater was a gift from the past
the letters had stopped coming
I had not expected the drift
I shovelled that sense of loss
and let the wind stop my thoughts
shouldn't I have spun a tale for friends
change the old to new?

"an image that forms behind the eyes
how do I explain dancing words?"

26 comments:

HyperCRYPTICal said...

A wonderful write!

Anna :o]

brenda w said...

This flowed fast a furiously. It reads like it came to you quickly from a muse with something to say. Excellent write!

zongrik said...

i liked how you linked this to the old/new theme going around for new year

Traci B said...

Great poem, gautami. You express so many emotions and desires in so few lines.

oldegg said...

No, some secrets of the past should be held tight within you. I love to imagine those dancing words behind your eyes, but don't tell me their secret.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Regrets, I've had a few...

Emotive writing. Thank you.

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

The tale should be spun, I think, only if the friends are willing to sit still long enough to listen...

A Whirl of Haiku

Peggy said...

Excellent. I enjoy concise verse like this that gives just the hints of a story. Happy New Year.

The Write Girl said...

This is beautiful. I especially love the turn it takes in the final lines. Nicely written.

Cheryl said...

Very concise and wonderful!

Gyanban said...

Beautifully written ! Liked the touch of nostaliga...

Harshad mehta said...

Words in your writings are freely dancing. Always a pleasure to watch that dance.

no need to explain even if you can.

Ramesh Sood said...

I always come here to enjoy what yu write.. and it always leaves me awe strcuk.. Thanks Gautami..for each treat..A very Happy New Year to You and yours..

Ostensible Truth said...

nice write here! great flow, nice seeing it up at Real Toads

Lilibeth said...

I loved the way you shoveled that sense of lost. It expresses it very well.

PsycheBubbles said...

A very distinct style uve got!
Lovely. Keep sharing!

Happy new year! :)

Nita Jo said...

I love the imagery in your writing!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So well done.

Marian said...

wow, nice, like a whirlwind. or an unraveling sweater. happy new year!

Kay L. Davies said...

Beautifully done!
All the best to you for 2012.

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Marbles in My Pocket said...

Wonderful write!

http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/12/31/one-day-at-a-time/

Caty said...

yeah, i feel this exactly...brilliant write :)

booguloo said...

I like it. The words danced.

Taylor Boomer said...

Glad for what you did,

Happy New Year.

Chèvrefeuille said...

Loved reading this poem. Thank you for sharing

Andy said...

Hello.
I enjoyed reading this. Especially liked the last couple of stanzas.
Nicely done, as usual!
Thanks for sharing.

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