Sunday, April 29, 2012

drowning words

image by Manu Pombrol
eyes fixed on the book
I sit in bottled sea
reminiscing about squandered time
green moss follows me
creating a stormy lane in the confined space
if it had been a pewter container
I would have hidden from your prying eyes
but now I am in an intractable alley
elusive in my indignity;
flocks of thoughts chase me,
beating on the walls of my mind

"I am forced to accommodated my naked being, 
don't you dare comment on it."

........

Writing after three weeks. I am just happy to be able to do so. For now.

17 comments:

brenda w said...

Your opening line draws me in, and I love how it fits the picture. May your words continue to rise.

thingy said...

A wonderful take. It truly flows.

Kay said...

love the line 'flocks of thoughts chase me'....sweet..xx

Little Nell said...

Excellent - you seem to have drawn on one of those Freudian dreams we are all supposed go have at sometime in our lives. The fear of being naked and not able to hide our nakedness.

De said...

"bottled sea"...YES.
This flows beautifully. So visual.

De Jackson (WhimsyGizmo)
http://whimsygizmo.wordpress.com/2012/04/29/the-anecdote-of-the-jar/

Mark Windham said...

love the last two lines

Linda said...

The stress and pressure you bottled up in the 'confined space' of this short poem explode outward. Thank you for sharing, Gautami. I enjoyed the read.

flaubert said...

The closing to this is lovely, Gautami.

Pamela

Tess Kincaid said...

Moss and pewter...two of my favorite things...

daphnepurpus said...

Wonderful and I too like the last two lines especially!

Fred Rutherford said...

Really like this. Well-drawn and love the dialogue lines at the end. Very nice, thanks

Sreeja said...

loved your poem.

Carrie Burtt said...

Truly beautiful! :-)

barbara said...

Reads as if your muse is back from vacation. Image and wordle seem to have been made for one another

Jinksy said...

elusive in my indignity

Nice idea...

Kutamun said...

Great poem , Gautami

Renee said...

Nice interpretation of the image. Causes one to think. Commenting from Poetry Pantry.