Sunday, June 10, 2012

hang me on your door knob

Still Life, 1670, detail by Jean François de Le Motte
that stub
assorted letters
a notebook
pages from a book
a sealed envelope
newspaper cuttings
I see all those
that expression of yours
when writing
or that intense look when reading
strings of the past lay askew
tied neatly in a disreputable thread
photo frame riveted to the wooden wall
why does it stab at my heart
you hung her head
where did you throw her costume
eyeless she doesn't appear wanting
I can see clearly now
the wicked intricacies of your mind

"I do not wish to be a newspaper cut out,
ribboned to your collection"

36 comments:

Pranita said...

Very interesting take on the prompts! Loved esp the last line in quotes! Enjoyed the read... :)

Old pages invite prying

gsb said...

her costume is probably somewhere beneath the mess on my desk...thoughtful words

Old Ollie said...

cool and authentic - solid piece

Ramesh Sood said...

Awesome..brilliantly creative..

zongrik said...

great pun in "hung her head"

painting details

Karen said...

Love the last line!

ecogrrl said...

...and the quote infinitely seals it...nice piece...

zanzinece said...

This is delightful, fresh, made me smile. Your work is always so.

christopher said...

I really like the way you work. People are picking up on stuff you may not be deliberately doing even while you are wise enough to choose rich words so that these things can happen. That's the best way.

Susie Clevenger said...

So creative...beautiful

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Photo frame riveted, your heart stabbed. Disembodied head, costume not in the shot, man, gautami, this is amazing stuff. Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/06/11/ugly/

Isadora Gruye said...

what an emotionally charged piece.. thanks for posting

Dave King said...

This is a really interesting and compelling take on what I thought was a difficult prompt.

Aidz Giannini said...

Enjoyed the way you strung or should that be hung this

kaykuala said...

"I do not wish to be a newspaper cut out,ribboned to your collection"

Beautiful words, Gautami! Your verse has a smooth flow

Hank

Gemma Wiseman said...

It bites with brash venom in a very stylish way! A lively read!

Little Nell said...

Thought provoking and quite sad; the detritus of a lost relationship.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

awesome!..

JJRod'z

Tania A said...

"strings of the past lay askew
tied neatly in a disreputable thread"

My favorite part. This is a delicious read.

Kay said...

truly wonderful and interesting piece...xx

Herotomost said...

Its those traces....those leftover things, some physical, some not that pull the chain of memories and cause them to come raining down. Sometimes I feel I could have tried a little harder to put up with those that I didn't find to my taste...but then again. Wonderful.

Kim Nelson said...

Love the flow of this, and the last two lines are stellar.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/08/lighten-your-own-load/

joanne said...

A very lovely and well-written poem.......deep and thoughtful

oldegg said...

I love the way you use this poem to explain the way a writer's mind stores away memories, using odd prompts to stimulate the brain into producing their work until one observer realizes that nothing is off limits to a truly creative person. May 'wicked intricacies" continue to plague my mind too!

Sandra said...

awesome...!!

Karen S. said...

Oh so nicely written....and I'm happy that I'm not a newspaper period! Ha! Ha!

Peggy said...

Wow, beautiful! Very good piece of writing.

Daydreamertoo said...

I wouldn't want to be part of someone's collection either.
Well said :)

Mary said...

Well expressed!

Keiths Ramblings said...

Brilliant as ever.

Myrna R. said...

I love how you tied in both of these prompts. The last few lines made me smile. I saw a little humor in it, though I know the ending is quite serious. I enjoyed reading your lovely poem.

Jyothi Nair said...

Never thought the prompt can lead to something like this too. I am truly honored to read such poetry.

Sreeja said...

Very beautiful and brilliant.

David Thomas said...

Love the suggestion here. It leads us into dark places.

Hannah said...

Yes, suggestive of dark...well written!

Sue said...

Really intriguing. I especially liked these iines:

you hung her head
where did you throw her costume