Monday, July 02, 2012

yellowed with age

Ophelia by Odilion Redon 
here I listen to the silence
lying on that floor
my eyes are closed
my mind open to your every nuance
you bring me flowers
I hold those to me
I am in no mood to inhale the scent
as I am saturated with you
my soul flew to you
as an un-moored kite
you pushed me hard
I fell in a thud on that stretch of ground
where someone had painted the manhole cover, blue

"I will slip into the underground
deep into soulful sleep
you climb every mountain
as high as my sigh"

25 comments:

Sandra said...

beautiful...love the words !

HaikuWater said...

Evokes so many nuanced feelings as I read this remarkable verse.

oldegg said...

The remarkable thing about this beautiful verse is that it conjures up some quite terrible images at the same time. Such a steadfast love betrayed by her lover. Brilliant!

Gemma Wiseman said...

Evocative and sensual betrayal! "saturated with you..." is so powerful!

gsb said...

I feel the loss of a deep love..a high and low...your words have pulled many thoughts from my mind

Sue said...

Nice job on combining two prompts!

=)

keiths ramblings said...

Delightful. I see that your first line is this weeks prompt at Carry on Tuesday - I'd love you to post it there too

Jack said...

Gautami,

Reaction to betrayal told so forcefully.

Take care

Berowne said...

A most refreshing take on the well-known Ophelia story...

Jo said...

I am in awe that you could pull those two prompts together ... fabulous verse!

The Write Girl said...

You paint such a wonderful image with every verse. Beautiful.

Sreeja said...

Brilliant!

Archna Sharma said...

This is beautiful. Saturated in bitter images, feels like she is waking from a dream.

Kay said...

just beautiful!

anitamombanita said...

an interesting take on combining prompts. Well done!

Semaphore said...

Brings to the fore such a plethora of feelings

Brian Miller said...

huh really interesting...i like you looking at it as a blue manhole cover...that is fresh...

ayala said...

Nice piece...love this!

Myrna R. said...

This is both sensual and romantic. I love your words.

Pam said...

This is one of my favorites this week. Thank you for the rich imagery and unexpected lines.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Cleverly done.

Anna :o]

Green Speck said...

Very beautiful words :-)

gabrielle said...

Lush, tragic, timeless. I love the way you have personalized Ophelia’s story.
“O, you must wear your rue with a difference"

Kutamun said...

So much tension of opposites, i think its great

Jenny said...

Oh my.

Wow.

This was incredibly visual!

Just wonderful writing.

Thank you for sharing this.