Sunday, May 12, 2013

chants fill the mind rolling down to the heart

Old Couple: photo by Togan Gokbakar 
do they wish to rekindle 
to get that spark back
to get back to that vow made long ago
life now is such a drone
chants are circling around them like a halo

the blinding sun is also binding
they hide in that cave
they do not hold hold hands
but the fist in the crook of her hand
fills all the space in his heart

he knows he cannot be broken 
as long as she is there
he stares at us expressionlessly
challenging us silently
I retreat, let them be

"the music will play on and on for them both, 
as long as they have each other"


27 comments:

Ramesh Sood said...

You know how to create meaning..deep meaning with words..

Happy to be back here..

RS

Pam Olson said...

Love the blinding sun also binding!

Bill said...

widower . . .
sitting by the garden
she used to tend

VaNdAnA ShArMa said...

Indeed, as one grows older emotions become stronger i think....beautiful way of rekindling...lost emotions...

Kay said...

I love the chants circling..wonderful write..x

McGuffy Ann said...

This is a very thoughtful piece.

Maggie Grace said...

At my age, I so hope my marriage is not one that needs to be rekindled. A smile a day keeps us together. Very thoughtful writing.

Trellissimo said...

Bet the only music they can hear is a dirge, by the looks on their faces...

Bon said...

Interesting ekfrastic poem, the line about the fist tells all - about the way love changes as the couple has grown old together - sort of hardened but still a deep love.

oldegg said...

The odds are that he is going to leave her first. She is probably thinking well at least the house won't smell like an ashtray. I wonder what they thought of the photographer?

brenda w said...

I love "chants are circling around them like a halo."

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Some great lines in this poem, and you have told a very realistic story of the two in the photo. She appears so energized and purposeful, he looks resigned:)

Nanka said...

Expressionless is perfect and it is your charming expressions that has brought life to the couple!! ;)

Kutamun said...

Wonderful how you crept into their space to observe and then silently withdrew

mindlovemisery said...

"but the fist in the crook of her hand
fills all the space in his heart"

Love love! This is amazing work =) I am going to post mine tomorrow and I feel embarrassed everyone is so amazing

izzy said...

The fist can definitely fill his heart! great line- thanks.

Walt Wojtanik said...

Gautami, powerful and deep. Very nice.

Karen S. said...

Oh indeed you wrote them a happy ending, I almost did, but the more I studied both their expressions things began to change course!

Robyn Greenhouse said...

Amazing how you combined this set of words with the photo! I like how even if they are looking to regain their spark, he knows he can't be broken with her by him.

AJ Neugebauer said...

loved your very uplifting take on the pic.

Berowne said...

You've convinced me. You do have the ability to see beyond the obvious.

Susan Lindquist said...

Sometimes the life-long love transforms to a deep companionship that is so intuitive ... that's what I see in this couple and I think you've touched on that also ... great write!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Thoughtful write - I like it.

Anna :o]

kaykuala said...

They can if they work on them It would be something special if they do! Nicely Gautami!

Hank

Laura said...

so beautiful!

Tess Kincaid said...

Bittersweet...

LaTonya Baldwin said...

well done.