Monday, June 01, 2015

I want a red planet of my own

photo by Toni Frissell 
I need a nifty hat to keep me afloat 
just outside of my watery grave 
don't ever assume I have the privilege of misery

that thought is but stale 
where is my shoe, 
it is too late to contemplate 

remind me the chain of sequence 
(I was wearing white with five carat diamond)
 how I fell into water or was I pushed 

I am all mushed up in there 
akin to a boil in a cherry 
abhorring yet fascinating 

in the light of day 
don't let anyone get away 
I am not hidden in darkness 

"not again. never again. I will float out. 
I will not suffer the fate of Pluto"

24 comments:

SuyashJ said...

reminds me of neil degrasse tyson's quips on pluto

Berowne said...

Fine response to the prompt...

Jae Rose said...

Haunting poem which really illuminated the image

Strummed Words said...

A big thumbs up.I love it!

Gillena Cox said...

not even a hint is given your mystery remains tightly sealed.

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have a nice day

much love...


Myrna R. said...

There's something particularly eerie about a drowning. Was she pushed? I like how your character expresses her dismay and anger.

R.K. Garon said...

Beautiful!
ZQ

Helena said...

What a gritty, gripping story. You really did the prompt proud!

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Beautifully haunting..!
xoxo

Sandra said...

amazing !

kaykuala said...

don't let anyone get away
I am not hidden in darkness

Elements of mystery and perhaps criminal intent hinted here. It's good to leave them wondering, Gautami!

Hank

Dell Clover said...

WOW WOW WOW!

totomai said...

i like the twirl and swirl of emotions leading to that last line. good job

Kutamun said...

Enchanting ride down the Ganges

Chris D said...

Your character challenges, even though I'm not sure what will happen. This is a strong piece.

Well done!

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Georgia Koch said...

Enchanting and mysterious ... though not a little scary ... bravo! Bastet

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love "dont ever assume I have the privilege of misery". I resonate with that line!!!!

C.C. said...

I love that last line!

G L Meisner said...

Great poem, the POV is very interesting.

humbird said...

What a title and haunting words...

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Wow!

Karen S. said...

Ah yes, rise she will!

Theresa Milstein said...

I like the last line.

Tess Kincaid said...

Hats are essential...