tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post1767749216672384585..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: let me think of ways to jostle her backgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger34125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-51830935456323574752011-09-29T23:31:18.420+05:302011-09-29T23:31:18.420+05:30Love the repetition in this poem! Your ending line...Love the repetition in this poem! Your ending lines are brilliant: "let me think of ways to jostle her back<br />on second thoughts, I will let her merge into the darkness." First-rate ending.Mariannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17734900426632493796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-68576738841780930012011-09-29T03:59:31.389+05:302011-09-29T03:59:31.389+05:30I like the way you have made the poem climb into t...I like the way you have made the poem climb into that wonderful climax of the last two lines. Powerful and well-crafted.Intellibloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04262938291462934103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-39123004613295667182011-09-28T23:17:12.187+05:302011-09-28T23:17:12.187+05:30cooped in that shop
where she clutched the chats
o...cooped in that shop<br />where she clutched the chats<br />of strolling customers<br /><br />I found that phrase intriguing. Glad she finally got some space, some freedom.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-51311396945248916372011-09-28T08:04:47.119+05:302011-09-28T08:04:47.119+05:30the repetition added another layer to the poem. oh...the repetition added another layer to the poem. oh course is she real or product of a trouble mind ?cathyhttp://thequietone.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-82926166997781108952011-09-28T05:10:02.749+05:302011-09-28T05:10:02.749+05:30Sometimes, it's better to let them be... somet...Sometimes, it's better to let them be... sometimes, not always :)<br /><br />Cheers,<br /><a href="http://scribblefest.com/author/arnab-majumdar/" rel="nofollow">Arnab Majumdar on SribbleFest.com</a>Arnab Majumdarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15746493850475907233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-84680181889750283402011-09-27T21:46:20.443+05:302011-09-27T21:46:20.443+05:30Wonderful story poem; the use of the refraining li...Wonderful story poem; the use of the refraining line is very effective. Now I'm weaving stories about this mysterious woman and her pet raven - is she a mannequin or statue come to life, a wallflower of a shop girl finally free of a job she hated, a genie let out of a bottle? So many possibilities...Traci Bhttp://poemflow.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-75826635532215202702011-09-27T07:14:59.271+05:302011-09-27T07:14:59.271+05:30Very imaginative Gautami. Yes, I wonder too why yo...Very imaginative Gautami. Yes, I wonder too why your thoughts tend to letting her merge into the darkness. Perhaps if the speaker is also the girl on the rock ...Ann Grenierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13501522748426995035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-7372713852415227402011-09-27T00:57:08.120+05:302011-09-27T00:57:08.120+05:30She wouldn't be easy...a wonderful read!She wouldn't be easy...a wonderful read!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-47885868445662566242011-09-26T15:11:08.316+05:302011-09-26T15:11:08.316+05:30imaginative poetry, beautifully done.
that gothic ...imaginative poetry, beautifully done.<br />that gothic image goes in nicely with the poem.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-79590060068150177382011-09-26T13:55:28.404+05:302011-09-26T13:55:28.404+05:30Good take on the wordle words!! Progresses beautif...Good take on the wordle words!! Progresses beautifully to end with those marvelous last lines!! I liked your second thoughts, she is better outside!!<br />Don't even think of jostling her back!! :)Nankahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05428694673909046094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-86712744861385019832011-09-26T13:27:43.063+05:302011-09-26T13:27:43.063+05:30Love it - wonder why your second thoughts?
Anna :...Love it - wonder why your second thoughts?<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-48254345021332256262011-09-26T09:08:01.707+05:302011-09-26T09:08:01.707+05:30nice...intriguing write...i like the echo of the r...nice...intriguing write...i like the echo of the refrain through out and the expansion on it at the close...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-72720101770900395192011-09-26T07:15:19.866+05:302011-09-26T07:15:19.866+05:30Imaginative, and some really good phrases, with a ...Imaginative, and some really good phrases, with a solid use of repetition.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-24197407456156194292011-09-26T06:43:50.658+05:302011-09-26T06:43:50.658+05:30This is a favorite for me today. I love your repe...This is a favorite for me today. I love your repetition, the picture, the wordle words. All of it, you created something with intriguing beauty. Brava!brenda whttp://undercaws.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-17080893806635370752011-09-26T06:07:02.190+05:302011-09-26T06:07:02.190+05:30Of all the words to use in a repeating phrase, &qu...Of all the words to use in a repeating phrase, "jostle." I found it to be the most difficult of all, and you play with it; roll it around on the tongue and give it a life.<br />Marvelous.Mike Patrickhttp://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-47512556466153120382011-09-26T06:05:00.197+05:302011-09-26T06:05:00.197+05:30i wish you luck in finding ways to jolt her back t...i wish you luck in finding ways to jolt her back this is great the image of her in that shop very well done<br />http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/24/loneliness-the-anger-of-lost-hope/Ann LeFlorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09421100825301270608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-79973630202456337612011-09-26T05:28:12.657+05:302011-09-26T05:28:12.657+05:30sometimes the world inside our head, is better tha...sometimes the world inside our head, is better than realityChristinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10433262472050607402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-32318040258946222422011-09-26T04:51:50.541+05:302011-09-26T04:51:50.541+05:30Amazing how you wrote this for three separate prom...Amazing how you wrote this for three separate prompts. Sometimes it is better to merge with darkness, I think. I wrote to all 3 prompts, but if you visit one:<br /><br />http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2011/09/manifesto.htmlMaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-9615548986917279372011-09-26T04:00:48.217+05:302011-09-26T04:00:48.217+05:30Oh, such a difficult decision to be made. Jostle h...Oh, such a difficult decision to be made. Jostle her back to the shop where she was unhappy, or let her remain in the dark, in the place of her dreams.<br />Who are we to say "It would be better for you to go back to unhappiness"?<br /><br /><br />Kay, Alberta, Canada<br />An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous TravelKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-7023117760863917492011-09-26T02:43:29.607+05:302011-09-26T02:43:29.607+05:30The last lines are my favorite. This is wonderful!...The last lines are my favorite. This is wonderful!Lady Emhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03325255283296087216noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-3439357225832462412011-09-26T02:31:02.296+05:302011-09-26T02:31:02.296+05:30Jostle is such a fine word! and you
ended up leani...Jostle is such a fine word! and you<br />ended up leaning in the same kind of direction I went- Thanks.izzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06379007428464069723noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-74662924161476753102011-09-26T02:10:42.472+05:302011-09-26T02:10:42.472+05:30Wonderful use of the refrain to jostle us back fro...Wonderful use of the refrain to jostle us back from her space, into the next room's window.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-9163388534971205232011-09-26T01:44:10.317+05:302011-09-26T01:44:10.317+05:30love the imagery and the linking refrain that draw...love the imagery and the linking refrain that draws you back each timeChronicles of Illusionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16168156674895078729noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-22635628195424508952011-09-26T01:16:32.444+05:302011-09-26T01:16:32.444+05:30So it was the raven who brought down the rain on h...So it was the raven who brought down the rain on her finery! If I was he, I would stand out of kicking range!<br />Liked the story and the idea but wondered why you let her 'merge into the darkness' when you could have tried harder to jostle her back.Stafford Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03048757515249725540noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-90208587411982666562011-09-26T00:49:25.590+05:302011-09-26T00:49:25.590+05:30I really enjoyed reading this one and the picture ...I really enjoyed reading this one and the picture really adds to the mood. Excellent! I love seeing where people go with these wordles. And thank you for your visits to my blog and the comments!Peggyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10811244438243200435noreply@blogger.com