tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post3659874939389982569..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: timid embrace forces out dreary thoughtsgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-46151329580715506482009-06-01T05:05:43.693+05:302009-06-01T05:05:43.693+05:30beautiful!beautiful!Dee Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05077141911351737390noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-38308632187639978342009-05-30T12:25:26.216+05:302009-05-30T12:25:26.216+05:30Oh, G,
I'm not sure if you made a typo or wanted "...Oh, G,<br />I'm not sure if you made a typo or wanted "troubled" psyche instead of "trouble" in the last line? Either way the power of this poem culminates splendidly. Full circle, as it were...Lynnehttp://colouryourworld.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-18435935191386822512009-05-30T12:22:41.730+05:302009-05-30T12:22:41.730+05:30You portray the emotional effects of the power of ...You portray the emotional effects of the power of a hug for this child and for you wonderfully.<br /><br />(See your email for who this was/is.) :)Lynnehttp://colouryourworld.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-63905664256725157112009-05-29T08:05:03.178+05:302009-05-29T08:05:03.178+05:30A wonderful write on many levels particularly the ...A wonderful write on many levels particularly the idea the embrace of the timid emaciated girl had the powerful impact of changing your own emotions.Janice Thomsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02506920585319893814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-61852953486360744632009-05-28T18:56:05.686+05:302009-05-28T18:56:05.686+05:30shows how an embrace takes two and can impact the ...shows how an embrace takes two and can impact the hugger as much as the huggee...PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-15686346996457748672009-05-28T11:52:56.606+05:302009-05-28T11:52:56.606+05:30I think this is fabulous! Deep, conveys both sides...I think this is fabulous! Deep, conveys both sides, and clear to understand. <br /><br />Thanks for coming by! <br />Happy 3WWAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-45747282295407352022009-05-28T08:59:48.383+05:302009-05-28T08:59:48.383+05:30Great!!Great!!sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03818420999930644450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-87512478295815715412009-05-28T08:18:59.634+05:302009-05-28T08:18:59.634+05:30Wow! There is some wonderful symmetry throughout ...Wow! There is some wonderful symmetry throughout this poem. And more importantly, I am moved by the humanity of it. Excellent! (Kudos for your 3WW enthusiasm this week)when the musics overhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16266298848244629919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-68245399513287771072009-05-28T07:13:03.032+05:302009-05-28T07:13:03.032+05:30Interesting, as always.Interesting, as always.zouxzouxhttp://www.zouxzoux.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-78074574886037815462009-05-28T04:23:49.840+05:302009-05-28T04:23:49.840+05:30Yeah, there's a lot going on here, and the message...Yeah, there's a lot going on here, and the message comes across loud and clear. Of course if you want to get it to sound right, you'll need another syllable on the bottom line of the first piece. My suggestion would be a 'the' in front of dreary.Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14765633868539628820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60755924480178288012009-05-28T00:41:19.456+05:302009-05-28T00:41:19.456+05:30i like the last onei like the last oneLife without Clotshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00626387562608801835noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-74505964592402791302009-05-28T00:16:33.958+05:302009-05-28T00:16:33.958+05:30just wow !! m always left speechless at the depth ...just wow !! m always left speechless at the depth of your writes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-19707980581500029322009-05-27T23:38:59.523+05:302009-05-27T23:38:59.523+05:30Thankyou for visiting my blog today and your good ...Thankyou for visiting my blog today and your good wishes.zetorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05912433866457968555noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-68025511951837725892009-05-27T23:35:22.253+05:302009-05-27T23:35:22.253+05:30I see myself and my daughter in this. Beautifully ...I see myself and my daughter in this. Beautifully done!Susan Helene Gottfriedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12778191943289129869noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-23233422313302091582009-05-27T23:27:44.742+05:302009-05-27T23:27:44.742+05:30I like the exchange of words as well as the embrac...I like the exchange of words as well as the embrace imagerylissahttp://www.justwritingwords.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-47552600962705689982009-05-27T22:46:40.124+05:302009-05-27T22:46:40.124+05:30You've captured the timidness very well here. Inte...You've captured the timidness very well here. Interesting how a little girl's embrace can change how someone feels at a given moment. Well done. Have a nice day.poefusionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15157059633840032305noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-23524639987345305502009-05-27T19:34:33.979+05:302009-05-27T19:34:33.979+05:30Hi Gautami,
I'm wholeheartedly with ThomG on this...Hi Gautami,<br /><br />I'm wholeheartedly with ThomG on this one.<br /><br />If you switch it to what you have changed it to, for me, I feel that you would need an "is" or a "has" before the gone, or the implication of one through the breath and space brought about by a "," after the "eyes".<br /><br />If you see what I mean.<br /><br />That would be my feedback. I'll be back to see what Thom says and what you end up with. <br /><br />And, and this is important, I enjoy your creation. Hope the monsoons have hit, for you.<br /><br />Coffee next time I'm in India, hopefully.<br /><br />Tschuess,<br />ChrisSepiru Chrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08600130405222535830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-6028272164610922582009-05-27T18:43:51.061+05:302009-05-27T18:43:51.061+05:30this was great, I liked how the last stanza clarif...this was great, I liked how the last stanza clarified it was a little girl. very nice! -MegAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-21641995653168344272009-05-27T18:08:59.096+05:302009-05-27T18:08:59.096+05:30Thanks ThomG for the feedback. I dropped the 'now....Thanks ThomG for the feedback. I dropped the 'now.' I feel it reads better. What do you say?gautami tripathyhttp://firmlyrooted.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-82972709339341103352009-05-27T18:00:57.545+05:302009-05-27T18:00:57.545+05:30It does work on many levels, like Tony said. And I...It does work on many levels, like Tony said. And I like how each draws you out more.<br /><br />One point, the line, "dreary look from her eyes gone now" for me would read better as, "dreary look from her eyes now gone." See what you think.Thom Gabrukiewiczhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-67134228862736310412009-05-27T17:35:55.093+05:302009-05-27T17:35:55.093+05:30Impressive.......Impressive.......Whitesnakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07681488364720396274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-32518523042462305632009-05-27T17:06:13.856+05:302009-05-27T17:06:13.856+05:30It captures both your feelings. Wonderfully doneIt captures both your feelings. Wonderfully donepiahttp://courtingdestiny.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-45097040344495695012009-05-27T16:57:54.571+05:302009-05-27T16:57:54.571+05:30awwww that was awesome :D
loved it every bit :d
...awwww that was awesome :D<br /><br />loved it every bit :d<br /><br />http://fart-in-a-jar.blogspot.com/2009/05/3-words-only.htmlAmericanising Desihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04089753612782157378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-71486118940052019382009-05-27T15:08:20.900+05:302009-05-27T15:08:20.900+05:30Another deep one - it works on many levels.Another deep one - it works on many levels.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.com