tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post5071249641092348849..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: Life Force------Totally Optional Prompts/The Last Piastergautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-52326719503578023322008-02-03T07:54:00.000+05:302008-02-03T07:54:00.000+05:30Wow, what a challenge and you managed it beautifu...Wow, what a challenge and you managed it beautifully! This was so visual to me, so creative. I just loved it. It's been awhile since I've had time to write; it's great to visit your blog again. :~)Sherri B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00834386300886224116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-15518480047102569512008-02-03T01:13:00.000+05:302008-02-03T01:13:00.000+05:30you did a fantastic job with these prompts.you did a fantastic job with these prompts.polonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-77767165719802650912008-02-02T10:58:00.000+05:302008-02-02T10:58:00.000+05:30I liked the ending lineNurturing a life created by...I liked the ending line<BR/><BR/>Nurturing a life created by her is reason enough to live, to be born<BR/><BR/>I think I wrote very close to this, but not just life created by her but life in general..Ramblerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04048279856792308653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60337561781284664172008-02-02T10:36:00.000+05:302008-02-02T10:36:00.000+05:30Your images as always are beautiful, Guatami. I l...Your images as always are beautiful, Guatami. I love the way you tied it all together in the end. You've done both these exercises well. Have a nice weekend.poefusionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15157059633840032305noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-37739759905031381402008-02-02T09:42:00.000+05:302008-02-02T09:42:00.000+05:30gautami,I think I went the route you did, by using...gautami,<BR/><BR/>I think I went the route you did, by using the lines as a kind of remembering.<BR/><BR/>I like these lines best:<BR/>With mixed feeling, she watched her husband walking down to her<BR/>and heard his monotonous voice like pebbles hitting water,<BR/>ripples of her heart going round and round. <BR/><BR/>How did you find this process, having to integrate so many specific lines? I tried to make it fit a certain summer I remember well, but I'm not so sure I pulled it off. It's fun, but challenging.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-85713640041537797072008-02-01T07:37:00.000+05:302008-02-01T07:37:00.000+05:30I agree with UL that the last two lines tie it all...I agree with UL that the last two lines tie it all toghether and make the poem! <BR/><BR/>This was a difficult thing to do and you pulled it off!Linda Jacobshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-33531320601070379452008-02-01T05:25:00.000+05:302008-02-01T05:25:00.000+05:30Hi, it's an interesting experiment and quite a bra...Hi, it's an interesting experiment and quite a brave thing to post. I like the way you too, chose to use 'She'. 'She stood watching the moving sliding clouds.' a lovely image!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-31803174546508586432008-01-31T23:12:00.000+05:302008-01-31T23:12:00.000+05:30This has many strong images, Gautami........This has many strong images, Gautami........Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-14592124040058912742008-01-31T19:57:00.000+05:302008-01-31T19:57:00.000+05:30the last two lines, brilliant...every single line ...the last two lines, brilliant...every single line is perfect and it builds toward those last two lines...! procreation and nurture is indeed the life force of all that we are, thank you.ULhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15005895432233940416noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-1248929477079918632008-01-31T19:37:00.000+05:302008-01-31T19:37:00.000+05:30and what then i am forced to wonder for those who ...and what then i am forced to wonder for those who choose not to procreate????<BR/><BR/>wonderful implementation of the phrases from last piaster,, i had a really difficult time with that... and i am not sure what lesson was to come out of all of it.. that is the sad part....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-1122392922940576412008-01-30T11:17:00.000+05:302008-01-30T11:17:00.000+05:30You are so inventive. I seem to be losing most of ...You are so inventive. <BR/>I seem to be losing most of the mystical, metaphorical, and metaphysical applications regarding my existence...<BR/>a little more each year.<BR/><BR/>I love your splendid view because it is way more soothing than the stark reality of my cosmology.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for blowing my little Eyeore cloud away.Romeo Morningwoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10826410608415260786noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-77964183691220421512008-01-29T23:58:00.000+05:302008-01-29T23:58:00.000+05:30Susan, I do not recall saying I want to win. I onl...Susan, I do not recall saying I want to win. I only compete against myself. Never against another human being.<BR/><BR/>My posts are always open for critiquing. MOst of my regular visitors know that. I do take suggestions if I find those valid. I then, rewrite my pieces. <BR/><BR/>What you said here, it truly did not gel with me. Nothing personal to you.gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-26548552509384580972008-01-29T23:26:00.000+05:302008-01-29T23:26:00.000+05:30gautami,I shared how I read it. I respect that you...gautami,<BR/><BR/>I shared how I read it. I respect that you either find something useful in what I said or you don't. This isn't a debate to be won or lost.susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-22545023763978832942008-01-29T23:08:00.000+05:302008-01-29T23:08:00.000+05:30Nice job of 'sliding' clouds and two prompts into ...Nice job of 'sliding' clouds and two prompts into one delightful work.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-27888731429200728742008-01-29T23:05:00.000+05:302008-01-29T23:05:00.000+05:30What a cool exercise and a great poem. The thought...What a cool exercise and a great poem. The thoughts all running together in a fraction of time. The place and the view are like an iris out of focus and dreaming until her baby's cry jolts us back into the frame. *bravo*Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-39556298039417590502008-01-29T22:30:00.000+05:302008-01-29T22:30:00.000+05:30Thanks deathsweep and gilson.Susan too.Sliding doe...Thanks deathsweep and gilson.<BR/><BR/>Susan too.<BR/><BR/>Sliding does go well for clouds. I see clouds as moving, and sliding into each other. If you observe clouds, you can actually see that happening. Move and slide over each other.<BR/><BR/>I find melted butter delicious, tasty and of course, soft. It is not messy for me. As for as image go, rain and melted butter do go together, slipping over.<BR/><BR/>Maybe, I should have written it as:<BR/><BR/>"Drops of rain fell on her soft, as soft as melted butter"<BR/><BR/>Predictable may be, discordant? No.<BR/><BR/>Consider it me..Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-73937391320392016762008-01-29T21:50:00.000+05:302008-01-29T21:50:00.000+05:30Overall, the story was cohesive and in most instan...Overall, the story was cohesive and in most instances I enjoyed how you incorporated the required phrases.<BR/><BR/>“moving sliding clouds.”<BR/><BR/>Is there another word for sliding? In my mind, <I>sliding</I> doesn’t create the connotation I associate moving clouds. Additionally, two gerunds strung together often comes off clumsy.<BR/><BR/>the moon, broken off like a biscuit dipped in tea<BR/><BR/>delicious image. <BR/><BR/>“a cooked plate of noodles”<BR/><BR/>like how you followed with another food image. The consistency works.<BR/><BR/>“Drops of rain fell on her soft as melted butter”<BR/><BR/>Again the verb and image don’t connect here for me. Soft as melted butter is predictable and makes sense but associated with rain creates a messy image and I doubt that was you intention.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for the read.susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-25273395348512948882008-01-29T21:13:00.000+05:302008-01-29T21:13:00.000+05:30This is a VERY good poem, all sentences blended in...This is a VERY good poem, all sentences blended in smoothly, and there's a lot of feeling in it. Thanks for sharing!Gilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14764043301335852527noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-91201876030255982202008-01-29T20:07:00.000+05:302008-01-29T20:07:00.000+05:30I watched it unfold, I saw it.I watched it unfold, I saw it.deathsweephttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04942097009456195845noreply@blogger.com