tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post5944903855199889610..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: lucent pearlsgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-90799436349466769142009-12-29T21:52:32.776+05:302009-12-29T21:52:32.776+05:30I like this. I love how you chain the stanzas toge...I like this. I love how you chain the stanzas together with common words in the first and last lines. I caught the alliteration in this piece, especially in the seventh stanza ("lustrous lust/illustrates<br />/lucent pearls of sweat"). Luscious and lucent indeed. Nice job.<br /><br />-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-69686915210370563292009-12-28T18:14:06.769+05:302009-12-28T18:14:06.769+05:30Nice poem. It is simple and cute.
Thanks for shari...Nice poem. It is simple and cute.<br />Thanks for sharing it here.Margarethttp://blog.ckcsons.com/birthstone-for-june/2009/12/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-44183805304363802902009-12-28T02:01:33.873+05:302009-12-28T02:01:33.873+05:30Really enjoyed your choice of repetition..as usual...Really enjoyed your choice of repetition..as usual your ideas work perfectly. Good job!Cynthia Shorthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-38698126764365208302009-12-27T19:20:25.194+05:302009-12-27T19:20:25.194+05:30I like how the pearl while small is also a great c...I like how the pearl while small is also a great concentration of effort and patience and luster, which captures the sense of love and desire in the speaker.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-64322821056732994232009-12-27T10:52:45.873+05:302009-12-27T10:52:45.873+05:30An apt description of a pearl, the nacre of lumino...An apt description of a pearl, the nacre of luminous lust. Alliteration is finely tuned - this is an enjoyable read, for sure!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-45727013189124196782009-12-27T02:49:06.731+05:302009-12-27T02:49:06.731+05:30Very sensual imagery - good repetition...very well...Very sensual imagery - good repetition...very well done!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60875922904432481842009-12-26T23:13:14.731+05:302009-12-26T23:13:14.731+05:30Would that you would not immortalize in verse the ...Would that you would not immortalize in verse the more personal aspects of our past.<br /><br />It is indiscreet and remarkably inopportune given the current state of my affairs. I wish that you would not be so jealous.Percy Bisque Silleyhttp://percybisque.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-21883973216820420202009-12-26T19:57:26.829+05:302009-12-26T19:57:26.829+05:30Yes, I like this very much. Its sensuous repetiti...Yes, I like this very much. Its sensuous repetition of many aspects of lustre and light illuminating love - is exquisite, indeed. This is what the prompt intended - not just simpler repetitions, as mine was. Bravo!Wanda McCollarnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-72139758489921759002009-12-26T13:24:20.235+05:302009-12-26T13:24:20.235+05:30The repetition works perfectly here, with the pear...The repetition works perfectly here, with the pearl's circular journey completed "me into you... you into me". Very lovely.Francis Scudellarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01008685302028451297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-55540787485889772382009-12-26T12:37:27.959+05:302009-12-26T12:37:27.959+05:30Me too, me too. Yes, I loved these lines especial...Me too, me too. Yes, I loved these lines especially,<br />"miniscule space<br />can only explode<br />plundering us"<br />A wonderful physicality that is also more, and well expressed, simply so.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-53820212194596677922009-12-26T03:08:49.905+05:302009-12-26T03:08:49.905+05:30I really like what you have done with the prompt.....I really like what you have done with the prompt....than ks for sharing this.....happy holidays to youWayne Pitchkohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-11021800121831673092009-12-25T20:45:56.402+05:302009-12-25T20:45:56.402+05:30"me into you/a complete journey" is wort..."me into you/a complete journey" is worth a billion ...<br /><br />Best wishes<br />RalfRalf Brökerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-42371223272574841062009-12-25T12:29:54.862+05:302009-12-25T12:29:54.862+05:30lustrous lust... that does it for me too!
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Rig...lustrous lust... that does it for me too!<br /><br />:D<br /><br /><a href="http://fart-in-a-jar.blogspot.com/2009/12/rigid-stains.html" rel="nofollow">Rigid Stains</a>Americanising Desihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04089753612782157378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-82865292701658056852009-12-25T09:00:43.288+05:302009-12-25T09:00:43.288+05:30Nice that so strongly physical a poem contains thi...Nice that so strongly physical a poem contains this paradoxical observation: <br /><br /><i>words hinder<br />close my emotions<br />contain them in space</i><br /><br />Words, the medium of the poem, hinder the experience of the subject of the poem, but it is only through words that that hindered experience can be communicated to those who are not part of that experience.<br /><br />Strong images. Fine wording. Thought provoking.Paul Oakleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17426789386840488470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-13793985564397889602009-12-25T05:11:55.095+05:302009-12-25T05:11:55.095+05:30I like the way that the poem travels from the word...I like the way that the poem travels from the words used at the begining (sweat and pearl) back to those words at the end. Difficult to do. Thanks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-62220925560940790872009-12-25T03:44:54.700+05:302009-12-25T03:44:54.700+05:30Two become one - just for a moment.Two become one - just for a moment.Stan Skihttp://says-sir-ten.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-31018983637723510082009-12-24T23:23:41.447+05:302009-12-24T23:23:41.447+05:30My favorite:
miniscule space
can only explode
plu...My favorite:<br /><br />miniscule space<br />can only explode<br />plundering us<br /><br />the very us<br />on its culminated wake<br />of lusty delight<br /><br />Sexy and passionate!Erin Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03428693832930474044noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-21606062460169942252009-12-24T23:03:00.169+05:302009-12-24T23:03:00.169+05:30"words hinder." The beginning of wisdom ..."words hinder." The beginning of wisdom for a poet.Billhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10717622168200846486noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60786928438552947202009-12-24T20:33:06.783+05:302009-12-24T20:33:06.783+05:30First couple of lines, I'm like, what's wi...First couple of lines, I'm like, what's with the repetition? Then it caught and I watched it all flow. I liked it very much.Thom Gabrukiewiczhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-71215307926529489302009-12-24T20:06:34.772+05:302009-12-24T20:06:34.772+05:30Lustrous Lust---that does it for me ) Great sensuo...Lustrous Lust---that does it for me ) Great sensuous chant Gautami, I wish you and yours a very Merry Christmas xLorrainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14667955555940467301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-21290275918631738412009-12-24T17:58:32.068+05:302009-12-24T17:58:32.068+05:30lovely picture of lovelovely picture of loveDee Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05077141911351737390noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-85243259669122965352009-12-24T15:39:12.376+05:302009-12-24T15:39:12.376+05:30Great repetition - and passionate.Great repetition - and passionate.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.com