tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post7625967972765902512..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: the sun danced around him and he kissed the starsgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-20201932562068293142009-07-05T03:36:23.417+05:302009-07-05T03:36:23.417+05:30Very vivid. I loved it. (=Very vivid. I loved it. (=Vhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14226599576623415692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-30981656544736725952009-07-04T01:36:37.662+05:302009-07-04T01:36:37.662+05:30Gory!! Whoosh! Me likey! :DGory!! Whoosh! Me likey! :DWinnie the poohihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11445691463105808647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-40366280139686205572009-07-02T12:24:39.155+05:302009-07-02T12:24:39.155+05:30The Red rose and at the end the red color of death...The Red rose and at the end the red color of death. A very disturbing end of a lover.The Warrior Poethttp://shaikzakeerhussain.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-34964277271263734182009-07-02T11:40:38.428+05:302009-07-02T11:40:38.428+05:30strolled well with a pathetic ending. Fine piece.strolled well with a pathetic ending. Fine piece.cyclopsevenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11440123931878867581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-27537663657204030042009-07-01T04:47:05.734+05:302009-07-01T04:47:05.734+05:30It's interesting that the roses he gives her a...It's interesting that the roses he gives her are red when he is happy but white when he grows depressed. I like thst you switched it up. Red is what I would have expected just before the blood.Nara Malonehttp://narasnook.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-56622579896521370702009-07-01T04:43:47.590+05:302009-07-01T04:43:47.590+05:30Strong piece - a surprising end...Strong piece - a surprising end...Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-34873600618358864622009-07-01T00:53:03.228+05:302009-07-01T00:53:03.228+05:30Vivid, and then wrenching. I agree, there is often...Vivid, and then wrenching. I agree, there is often shock here in your poems, and sometimes I don't know what to do with it - but that's poetry, isn't it?Deborah Godinhttp://notesfromthecloudmessenger.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-76437374997479837512009-06-30T23:27:31.241+05:302009-06-30T23:27:31.241+05:30Yikes! I did not see that coming.
bYikes! I did not see that coming.<br /><br />bb+ (Retire In Style Blog)https://www.blogger.com/profile/05114209481329773753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-31487413257508932192009-06-30T22:16:21.136+05:302009-06-30T22:16:21.136+05:30tragic when love is not recripicated- heartache wa...tragic when love is not recripicated- heartache wants to kill us now. <br />I felt the despair. <br />haunting.Daily Panichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06179183072566661932noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-70788683380210202752009-06-30T21:06:14.070+05:302009-06-30T21:06:14.070+05:30and, I do stand, sit, type corrected. I usually o...and, I do stand, sit, type corrected. I usually only see your poetry train offerings, and my memory is of some very red meat. I've just looked through the last two months of your regular posts, and they're not bloody at all. But, the questions remain. You are your own muse.<br /><br />PS: If you don't mind my saying so, I'd reconsider "coming in spurts." Standing it its own line, and even in context with "he, dancing, kissing, whispering" it's the image of orgasm. Unless that's what you actually meant. Of course, it may be my dirty mind...<br /><br />Oh, and why is the last stanza set off by quotation marks?Richard Wellshttp://web.mac.com/rwellsrwells/iWeb/RW%27s%20Bundle%20of%20Hiss/Blog/Blog.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-35788659338010425922009-06-30T19:47:06.803+05:302009-06-30T19:47:06.803+05:30not criticizing, but opening a conversation: do y...not criticizing, but opening a conversation: do you wonder why your muse leads you to graphic violence? it is a particular voice. I often write with the desire to flip a perception, and go for the contradiction, and it often leads me to a darker take on the subject matter than would be obvious. I go that route to see more deeply, and avoid the cliche. (not always successfully.) And. sometimes I enjoy a shocker for dramatic effect. I think violent or surprising endings are a writing strategy, just like when a film maker decides to cut away, or linger on a scene. do you make conscious decisions when you write, or are your poems unedited?Richard Wellsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-52135403117319443412009-06-30T19:33:26.014+05:302009-06-30T19:33:26.014+05:30Hi Gautami,
I have been truant for a long time- he...Hi Gautami,<br />I have been truant for a long time- here is my take-<br /><br /><br />Spasms!<br /><br />She was my friend,<br />And she asked me,<br />If I could help her to die,<br />Believe me- she was not afraid<br />Of death, but of the pain... if she bled<br />As she was set<br />On the path to the Final Object!<br />So I told her of love<br />As a way of life, and she smiled<br />She said, it had died<br />And then I held her arm and prayed<br />As I held the blade<br />To her jugular, and obliged,<br />The spasms were indeed wild!KBDGR8ESThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07913027260824590822noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-6463514471548255192009-06-30T19:07:56.327+05:302009-06-30T19:07:56.327+05:30Hi, awesome poem with unexpected ending.Thank you ...Hi, awesome poem with unexpected ending.Thank you for sharing.venuss66https://www.blogger.com/profile/17804023747114879683noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-82445953478029108502009-06-30T18:51:16.481+05:302009-06-30T18:51:16.481+05:30Hard stuff. Impressive words.
Best wishes
RalfHard stuff. Impressive words.<br /><br />Best wishes<br />RalfRalf Brökerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-68576601434217232092009-06-30T16:38:02.169+05:302009-06-30T16:38:02.169+05:30Intriguing. I wonder if you're referencing any...Intriguing. I wonder if you're referencing anyone in a movie...Irenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12918979903066830662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-841849206296811452009-06-30T16:27:23.317+05:302009-06-30T16:27:23.317+05:30Lovely rhythm. Sad ending. C'est la vie!Lovely rhythm. Sad ending. C'est la vie!jabbloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12176958811589489979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-28495092129964239272009-06-30T15:39:47.444+05:302009-06-30T15:39:47.444+05:30a very dark piece here...
nice and thank you for s...a very dark piece here...<br />nice and thank you for sharing, gautami...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-73243206506345305322009-06-30T13:22:53.936+05:302009-06-30T13:22:53.936+05:30Your range of styles never ceases to amaze me. Fan...Your range of styles never ceases to amaze me. Fantastic piecekeithhttp://keithsramblings.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-13179621091075822492009-06-30T11:21:39.302+05:302009-06-30T11:21:39.302+05:30Richard, if you really go through my writing, you ...Richard, if you really go through my writing, you will find a balanced mix of poetry on Dark as well as positive ones. Maybe you ended up reading only the dark ones. <br /><br />I am not here to shock, you, myself or anyone else. I write whater my muse makes me to. Be it dark or otherwise.gautami tripathyhttp://firmlyrooted.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-66461796215283566032009-06-30T11:03:22.869+05:302009-06-30T11:03:22.869+05:30The last lines is awesome!!!The last lines is awesome!!!Jeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-77154241496952188192009-06-30T09:34:49.637+05:302009-06-30T09:34:49.637+05:30"vomit of despondency"
"knifed his ..."vomit of despondency"<br />"knifed his guts out"<br />Those are awesome lines. The whole poem is awesome. Vividly awesomeGeorge S Battyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15407137341843413701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-90129562958666836282009-06-30T04:46:53.264+05:302009-06-30T04:46:53.264+05:30Guatami, you've become quite the mistress of ...Guatami, you've become quite the mistress of shocking, and violent endings. I think back over your oeuvre (of the passed year +) and I wonder what you are telling us. that all things end in violence of some kind, or that all relationships are doomed? or is it that you just like shocking us (and perhaps yourself)?Richard Wellshttp://web.mac.com/rwellsrwells/iWeb/RW%27s%20Bundle%20of%20Hiss/Blog/Blog.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-51524265556552715722009-06-30T01:34:11.526+05:302009-06-30T01:34:11.526+05:30so many contrasts - wasn't expecting the endin...so many contrasts - wasn't expecting the ending.Dee Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05077141911351737390noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-86806614854428890562009-06-29T22:53:20.797+05:302009-06-29T22:53:20.797+05:30A drastic ending there. Nice :-)A drastic ending there. Nice :-)anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-30026962698231745352009-06-29T22:46:43.238+05:302009-06-29T22:46:43.238+05:30wow...
vivid description...
nice free flow and ch...wow...<br /><br />vivid description...<br />nice free flow and chain of thoughts..<br /><br />nicely penned...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com