tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post9036378572582746766..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: sleeping dreamsgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-50618483947297801692010-02-11T14:54:25.173+05:302010-02-11T14:54:25.173+05:30I, too am amongst those who liked your beautiful p...I, too am amongst those who liked your beautiful poem better than Margaret Atwood's poem.<br /><br />And thank you for stopping by at my blog and for your comment.<br /><br />RavenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-84957709767483492372010-01-24T01:49:24.198+05:302010-01-24T01:49:24.198+05:30There is always something that moves me when one p...There is always something that moves me when one poet finds inspiration from another and creates a derivation. This is one of my favorites from Margaret Atwood... I loved the visualization in yours.<br /><br />And the Silley "snoring poem" was artful and funny!<br /><br />quidrockquidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06954222271507913856noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-69891460739262084252010-01-23T08:01:28.798+05:302010-01-23T08:01:28.798+05:30I say you are wrong and that Nathan is a Gentleman...I say you are wrong and that Nathan is a Gentleman of Taste and Discernment who recognizes the Genius of my nostrl-based writing above on this thread.<br /><br />Since we hear nothing from Nathan, it is quite apparent that he agrees with this assessment.Percy Bisque Silleyhttp://percybisque.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-73407871298446040452010-01-23T07:02:39.464+05:302010-01-23T07:02:39.464+05:30Sir Silley, Nathan's comment was for my poem. ...Sir Silley, Nathan's comment was for my poem. Not yours. Infact yours is downright offensive!gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-72025111675614950342010-01-23T06:29:19.900+05:302010-01-23T06:29:19.900+05:30I thought your poem was wonderful ... and I can se...I thought your poem was wonderful ... and I can see the inspiration in the Atwood poem but you did a wonderful job carving out your own piece of beauty.Jennershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08044537551139633301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-90729680485899803502010-01-23T03:28:02.876+05:302010-01-23T03:28:02.876+05:30Nathan: Why thank you, kind Sir. Long hours have I...Nathan: Why thank you, kind Sir. Long hours have I spent studying the minutia of how snores are produced and manufactured in the domestic setting and it is no doubt for this reason that you so discerningly note my flare for details such as nostrils etc.Percy Bisque Silleyhttp://percybisque.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-66886719240649584142010-01-23T00:42:19.179+05:302010-01-23T00:42:19.179+05:30Vividly done -- I like your use of detail.Vividly done -- I like your use of detail.Nathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552467037640904091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-37359367043308960722010-01-22T23:31:51.336+05:302010-01-22T23:31:51.336+05:30Sir Silley, you are so insulting. I never invited ...Sir Silley, you are so insulting. I never invited you to visit my blog. Why can't you stay away? <br /><br />Next time you visit me, I will squash you like a fly!gautami tripathyhttp://firmlyrooted.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-54893843751512200672010-01-22T23:18:44.798+05:302010-01-22T23:18:44.798+05:30can’t get no sleep
so you sleep so snorefully
u...can’t get no sleep<br /> <br /><br />so you sleep so snorefully<br />uncaring that I hear you<br />those nostrils moving along<br />with your tremulous lips<br />your nose flaring a whole lot<br />the heave and ho of your chest<br />I subtly grab you round your throat<br />picking up your heart beat<br />I sway to the rhythm of it<br />Then steady myself and <br />push down hard as I can<br />your neck is too thick<br />does no good. closing my eyes<br />I join your snore-chorus<br />drowning you out with my own..Percy Bisque Silleyhttp://percybisque.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-90384863176030402692010-01-22T22:18:45.500+05:302010-01-22T22:18:45.500+05:30I've enjoyed some of Atwood's novels in th...I've enjoyed some of Atwood's novels in the past, but have read very little of her poetry.<br /><br />I must say I really prefer your poem to hers. I especially like the last line about adding the dreams.<br /><br />Thanks for visiting my link from FreeVerse this week!Kellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00859017153454691633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-53693917077163112392010-01-22T22:12:12.640+05:302010-01-22T22:12:12.640+05:30Very nice! I quite like both, and I like that you ...Very nice! I quite like both, and I like that you included the Atwood -- I am a fan of her poetry, and I think that the two poems here are complimentary.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10330550798080469047noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-47228744387850962312010-01-22T20:23:58.394+05:302010-01-22T20:23:58.394+05:30like how you connect in his dreams! Wonderful.like how you connect in his dreams! Wonderful.Serenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04745809545249574387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-17151270308874527262010-01-22T17:29:51.930+05:302010-01-22T17:29:51.930+05:30Both poems are nice, but I like yours the best.Both poems are nice, but I like yours the best.sagehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17499891950639742366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-23903736294112490422010-01-22T10:17:29.356+05:302010-01-22T10:17:29.356+05:30I like your version better -- it gets right to the...I like your version better -- it gets right to the point!Valeriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10401551604933163595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-29041503033862105392010-01-22T05:37:31.080+05:302010-01-22T05:37:31.080+05:30An occasional exercise in imitation or adaptationi...An occasional exercise in imitation or adaptationis a way of finding your own voice. I find it significant that Atwood's subjunctive becomes Gautami's indicative.Billhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10717622168200846486noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-80751367746127938542010-01-22T01:56:57.784+05:302010-01-22T01:56:57.784+05:30I see this as kind of a shorter restatement of Atw...I see this as kind of a shorter restatement of Atwood's poem. You focus more on the scene, while she depicts the inner life of the speaker as she watches the subject sleep. I think it works. Nicely done.<br /><br />-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-15702345188957542552010-01-22T01:22:57.727+05:302010-01-22T01:22:57.727+05:30It works for me! The nice touches in your poem mak...It works for me! The nice touches in your poem make it so very readable!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60726013908733155872010-01-21T22:54:39.215+05:302010-01-21T22:54:39.215+05:30I like your version so much better. It's sensu...I like your version so much better. It's sensual. Of course, I do have an aversion to Atwood, but still, I like your version. Thanks for sharing it with us.Cara Powershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15629469295992958988noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-85739030923148341942010-01-21T22:26:37.443+05:302010-01-21T22:26:37.443+05:30Sorry, I meant to give my name with that last post...Sorry, I meant to give my name with that last post above. The "Anonymous" posting is from me, Therese Broderick.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-45557018725881841112010-01-21T22:25:53.168+05:302010-01-21T22:25:53.168+05:30I think your poem is watching her poem. Derived fr...I think your poem is watching her poem. Derived from it. <br /><br />Maybe enter the Atwood poem into Google, translate it into a foreign language, then write your poem based on that translation?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-67735530982918515832010-01-21T21:07:15.326+05:302010-01-21T21:07:15.326+05:30very nice.
I like that idea of transcreationvery nice. <br />I like that idea of transcreationAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-39632695869322145632010-01-21T20:31:33.096+05:302010-01-21T20:31:33.096+05:30So lovely, very well done as usual...So lovely, very well done as usual...Cynthia Shorthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-25405110714012258692010-01-21T19:45:19.216+05:302010-01-21T19:45:19.216+05:30Hi Gautami,
I remember reading this last year. St...Hi Gautami,<br /><br />I remember reading this last year. Still lovely - and nice to see the inspiration.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-61400230812245442152010-01-21T19:43:32.886+05:302010-01-21T19:43:32.886+05:30wOW, DOUBLE WOW..I love both, !wOW, DOUBLE WOW..I love both, !Lorrainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14667955555940467301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-39270371290040233362010-01-21T17:21:32.767+05:302010-01-21T17:21:32.767+05:30I enjoyed your piece as a freestanding poem so I p...I enjoyed your piece as a freestanding poem so I passed on the Margaret Attwood!Dickhttp://patteran.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.com