tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post2298751596630143075..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: commas in the pausesgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-48450241676482071292010-09-13T09:12:39.458+05:302010-09-13T09:12:39.458+05:30thanks for stopping by and commenting and inviting...thanks for stopping by and commenting and inviting me to visit your One Shot. Interesting tone. I feel like I am in trouble :) Looking forward to reading more from you.Sheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-66742146137132093762010-09-11T13:42:05.364+05:302010-09-11T13:42:05.364+05:30Wonderful pauses and commas!Wonderful pauses and commas!irenehttp://enerihot.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-1683812117001319652010-09-10T23:39:02.906+05:302010-09-10T23:39:02.906+05:30Strong!!!Wonderful flow of wordsStrong!!!Wonderful flow of wordsJeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-69477103802187835652010-09-10T20:11:30.601+05:302010-09-10T20:11:30.601+05:30This is a tremendous piece of work. Love and Light...This is a tremendous piece of work. Love and Light, SenderAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-47892356691782119602010-09-10T18:53:47.364+05:302010-09-10T18:53:47.364+05:30Thank you, I particularly like your use of "r...Thank you, I particularly like your use of "robust", since you found a way to find a place for the word in its full sense in your poem, something not everyone did. "A robust space" in the way you used it actually made complete linguistic sense once you wrote "to hold under its own steam". Well done. Robust was the trickiest word in our challenge. And so when "your pigheadedness broke into it" then "pigheadedness" also made sense as something more than ordinary attention might be required to break into the robust space at this point. Yes.<br /><br />The three words we are given are not always so easy to place without some kind of forcing. To use the allusion to a "robust wine" was perhaps the easiest way to get past the word and you did not use this easy way out. You could have given your subject. At least I can see how to rewrite and put wine in place of space. I commend you for avoiding that choice.christopherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04201537517464996231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-88942531280935562802010-09-10T11:14:51.971+05:302010-09-10T11:14:51.971+05:30I'm out somewhere in the wings
Nice One Shot...I'm out somewhere in the wings<br /><br /><br />Nice One Shot - so clever<br /><br />Moon smilesmoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-74405982072280409142010-09-09T23:47:31.897+05:302010-09-09T23:47:31.897+05:30Isn't it pig-headedness? This One Shot really...Isn't it pig-headedness? This One Shot really put me in a comma... um, coma.Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-50925929834879043832010-09-09T22:13:51.769+05:302010-09-09T22:13:51.769+05:30Thanks Pete! I will check out the One Shot poems o...Thanks Pete! I will check out the One Shot poems over the weekend!gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-75284963605100268312010-09-09T18:39:50.161+05:302010-09-09T18:39:50.161+05:30What an interesting take on the prompt, Gautami. L...What an interesting take on the prompt, Gautami. Like Barbara, I also loved the idea of robust space. Powerful and nicely done!Christinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06291220353313572984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-72994671192254509142010-09-09T18:16:17.947+05:302010-09-09T18:16:17.947+05:30Great One Shot post! Welcome. Enjoy your poem espe...Great One Shot post! Welcome. Enjoy your poem especially the beginning repetitions in the lines and the spirited tone. Cheersdustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-69302076915219992822010-09-09T14:13:26.120+05:302010-09-09T14:13:26.120+05:30a superb share with one shot and i hope it gets th...a superb share with one shot and i hope it gets the views it deserves..i put you up.so no need to worry and thanks for sharing..peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-33287495310805105142010-09-09T11:53:59.984+05:302010-09-09T11:53:59.984+05:30This is just awesome!
Amalgamation made it more i...This is just awesome!<br /><br />Amalgamation made it more intriguing and the ending line is just powerful!<br /><br />Great use of the prompt Gautami! ;)Amityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18222122594130598313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-23340269848866689442010-09-09T06:59:08.340+05:302010-09-09T06:59:08.340+05:30A great take on the prompt. I love "amalgama...A great take on the prompt. I love "amalgamation / of I know not what". That thought sums up a lot of poems - and yet they work, as yours does.Mr. Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05507517064398624652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-46525690111173857672010-09-09T05:18:34.890+05:302010-09-09T05:18:34.890+05:30Gautami, I always love your stuff, but this one is...Gautami, I always love your stuff, but this one is somehow even deeper and richer. Maybe, because like you said, it seemed to write itself. I too like the robust pauses, and the last line, but also the rest of what surrounds those two things, making them even better for that support,<br /><br />ElizabethElizabethhttp://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-88270363961891738892010-09-09T05:10:33.278+05:302010-09-09T05:10:33.278+05:30I'm not even sure what to say. That never stop...I'm not even sure what to say. That never stops me, though. Beautiful.Fay Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17123764854210271111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-86651449532299331392010-09-09T04:09:10.135+05:302010-09-09T04:09:10.135+05:30Your words are always inspired....and always inter...Your words are always inspired....and always interestingly written. I love the last line.Diane Thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15886778060199433214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-49526491787938521072010-09-09T03:04:46.948+05:302010-09-09T03:04:46.948+05:30Wonderful writing. I like where you went with the ...Wonderful writing. I like where you went with the prompt. I am in agreement about the last line.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-48650095722986156612010-09-09T02:50:57.830+05:302010-09-09T02:50:57.830+05:30I really appreciate how you took this prompt. I wi...I really appreciate how you took this prompt. I will echo everyone else and say the last line is killer.Thom Gabrukiewiczhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-82269658432512580432010-09-09T00:28:05.551+05:302010-09-09T00:28:05.551+05:30"I never dangled the space
I presumed it to b..."I never dangled the space<br />I presumed it to be robust"<br />is a great phrase!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-84372560039736855122010-09-08T21:14:54.496+05:302010-09-08T21:14:54.496+05:30I especially love the line "ogle at the pause...I especially love the line "ogle at the pauses".... beautiful!<br /><br /><a href="http://juliejordanscott.typepad.com/jjspoetry/2010/09/language-spell-poem-inspired-by-three-word-wednesday.html" rel="nofollow"> My 3ww </a>Julie Jordan Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06558015761690505791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-70468049577299785302010-09-08T19:46:33.601+05:302010-09-08T19:46:33.601+05:30Gautami this is fantastic and the ending is superb...Gautami this is fantastic and the ending is superb!<br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-49510794368394254772010-09-08T19:30:10.468+05:302010-09-08T19:30:10.468+05:30You really got cooking at the end (not that i am n...You really got cooking at the end (not that i am not enamored of commas) . I am fascinated by the idea of robust space. And the line at the end is a knockoutbarbarahttp://briarcat.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-89962330345543263182010-09-08T19:23:05.233+05:302010-09-08T19:23:05.233+05:30Very beautiful.. liked it a lot, Gautami..as usual...Very beautiful.. liked it a lot, Gautami..as usual the end line takes the breath away..Ramesh Soodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05589155663544312563noreply@blogger.com