tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post5762308023503618866..comments2023-09-29T15:38:34.435+05:30Comments on rooted: ashes of radiating electronsgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-1445083590483434382011-08-15T22:44:13.646+05:302011-08-15T22:44:13.646+05:30He ment well (sometimes did):
You are welcome pos...He ment well (sometimes did):<br /><br />You are welcome post anything you want on my blog. I usually don't respond to comments unless something really hits hard. Your poem does. I would rather not say more...gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-73570160012062997352011-08-13T09:45:41.920+05:302011-08-13T09:45:41.920+05:30This fits with a post by Christopher and my respon...This fits with a post by Christopher and my responce to his I will post here. Visceral,Now<br />strong cutting, and wounded is how I feel after reading this. May I have permission to post this on my blog?<br /> <br /> <br />only me 8/12/11<br /><br />The pain is exquisite<br />My soul cries out from beyond me<br />Where once there was us<br />Now only me<br />The setting for you at my life’s table<br />Still there, unfilled<br />Plate just so<br />Utensils unused, pristine<br />How else could it be?<br />Without you in my life<br />AS before us<br />Now only meWanderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12384347526625976847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-90640031504801567092011-08-13T09:10:18.684+05:302011-08-13T09:10:18.684+05:30A lovely, powerful piece that pulls from the deep....A lovely, powerful piece that pulls from the deep. I love this.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-21715322263459707282011-08-13T07:31:26.191+05:302011-08-13T07:31:26.191+05:30love the title, for someone who lives with sleepin...love the title, for someone who lives with sleeping issues, I understand this oneChristinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10433262472050607402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-71713388510920897922011-08-12T20:41:38.814+05:302011-08-12T20:41:38.814+05:30Powerful piece, beautiful...Powerful piece, beautiful...brenda whttp://undercaws.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-22799297593534509802011-08-12T19:19:50.806+05:302011-08-12T19:19:50.806+05:30The last stanza -- especially the last two lines -...The last stanza -- especially the last two lines -- are cutting. It does hurt when someone edits you from their life...and even more painful when done slowly. Well done.<br /><br />-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-7426427961513980242011-08-12T06:57:33.750+05:302011-08-12T06:57:33.750+05:30That last line is enigmatic.That last line is enigmatic.irenehttp://enerihot.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-26951035744520030762011-08-12T05:11:03.708+05:302011-08-12T05:11:03.708+05:30Thanks for your visit to my site...and for leaving...Thanks for your visit to my site...and for leaving your link. A nicely-written piece! Reminds me of Isaiah 61:3.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-54568126311702335142011-08-12T04:43:37.536+05:302011-08-12T04:43:37.536+05:30What terrible sadness you have captured in this be...What terrible sadness you have captured in this beautiful poem. I can feel the hurt and and see the determination to move on, but not without the pain.Old Egghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14727444489103758018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-45267569539965670142011-08-12T01:48:35.527+05:302011-08-12T01:48:35.527+05:30The last two lines of your sonnet wrap it up beaut...The last two lines of your sonnet wrap it up beautifully. Collect the ashes and use them to build a shrine. One of the more powerful statements I’ve ever read. We’ve all experienced collecting the ashes, too often the shrine has no foundation.Mike Patrickhttp://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-62704064180716697522011-08-12T00:25:18.652+05:302011-08-12T00:25:18.652+05:30Great imagery.
"edit me from you life/ with ...Great imagery. <br />"edit me from you life/ with your paring knife" - Great lines!Jess PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10775984664764629241noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60869476909195974742011-08-11T23:17:45.199+05:302011-08-11T23:17:45.199+05:30impressed.impressed.Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05532576755186051550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-45642605365032518902011-08-11T22:33:31.996+05:302011-08-11T22:33:31.996+05:30Pamela, thanks or asking. I have not been too well...Pamela, thanks or asking. I have not been too well. I have missed your poetry. Entirely my loss...gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-26940706681328960212011-08-11T22:30:02.780+05:302011-08-11T22:30:02.780+05:30A charged up poem radiating power!!A charged up poem radiating power!!Nankahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05428694673909046094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-46950667525014733612011-08-11T22:28:29.529+05:302011-08-11T22:28:29.529+05:30Gautami, that opening stanza is gorgeous.
Pamela...Gautami, that opening stanza is gorgeous. <br /><br />Pamela<br />btw How have you been? I hope well.flauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-16467608501732895712011-08-11T17:58:17.298+05:302011-08-11T17:58:17.298+05:30We all pass on into electrons..it has to think of ...We all pass on into electrons..it has to think of being erased completely..you have conveyed this perfectly..JaeJae Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11509244123008832611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-72603773228075234412011-08-11T15:55:11.348+05:302011-08-11T15:55:11.348+05:30Power-packed lines...
especially the opening line,...Power-packed lines...<br />especially the opening line,I liked it a lot...:)<br />Interesting title!Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-86466327876652567382011-08-11T10:51:02.845+05:302011-08-11T10:51:02.845+05:30Direct as it might seem at first, yet retains much...Direct as it might seem at first, yet retains much at that creative moment (when truth can go lots of ways) like surreal I mean. Just a mere six inches to one side, but that's enough to awaken the skin, wonder about the touch of this poem. Strong AND interesting! Thanks. <br />~neilneil reidhttp://bearlyaudible.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-28643449193514649552011-08-11T10:14:42.820+05:302011-08-11T10:14:42.820+05:30I will stay awake all night,
night after night,
w...<i>I will stay awake all night,<br />night after night, <br />while you edit me from your life<br />with your paring knife</i><br /><br />Great lines. Loved the staying awake to avoid the dreams.Bonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10096591352278195759noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60898815405286511982011-08-11T03:32:00.902+05:302011-08-11T03:32:00.902+05:30Thanks...gave me an idea
I shall use the spin
(el...Thanks...gave me an idea<br /><br />I shall use the spin<br />(electrons often go left)<br />to build this castle.christopherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04201537517464996231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13825130.post-60368580563121384322011-08-11T00:52:13.046+05:302011-08-11T00:52:13.046+05:30wow so powerful good for you.This is a strong voic...wow so powerful good for you.This is a strong voice.Sheilagh Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13741333943021570641noreply@blogger.com