Friday, August 17, 2007

Waiting......[Fiction] Friday

This week, [Fiction] Friday asks us to pick an adult character (it can be a new character, an established character, or even a famous character from fiction) and write a scene where the character demonstrates one of the following child-like habits:

Drinks chocolate milk when (s)he has a bad day
Sleeps cocooned in bedsheets or blankets
Constantly twists hair around finger
Pulls the crust off of any sandwich they eat
Often makes sound effects when talking to themself
Must sleep with a particular stuffed animal or blanket
Stomps foot when angry
Overuses Ketchup (both too much, and too often)
Hoards personal belongings (books, CDs, etc.) in their bed
Loudly, and badly, drums on books, tables, etc.

Continuing from where I left off last week, lured into lord's lair:

she stomped her foot,
loudly drumming on that side table
asking for food.
her hunger was ravenous.
when the lord fetched the food,
she pulled crusts off the sandwich,
pouring half a bottle of ketchup on it-
washed it with drinking chocolate
replenished, she fell into the bed.
cocooning in bed sheets and blankets
she talked to herself, trying to sleep,
twisting her hair unconsciously.
she missed her stuffed grey elephant,
turning she found her favourite
carved knife under her pillow.

waiting soundlessly for the lord
in order to plunge it into his heart!!

It is really fun to write with that no-edit rule. It suits me fine!
As you can see, this character demonstrates all those child-like habits..:D


liz said...

Whoa, Gautami! I wouldn't want to be her enemy. I like the flow of your story. Good job!

David said...

HEY! you are having WAY too much fun with the language.
my compliments on your playfulness.

Bob-kat said...

That writing has a nice energy to it! Lots of pent up aggresion in many of those actions which is a nice contrast to them being associted with more child-like things.

I think we all display child-like behaviours sometimes. Michele sent me over to admit to liking too much ketchup and chocolate milk!

polona said...

wow! more great stuff!

Don Iannone said...

these are wonderful, gautami. they will be nice additions to your book...

lissa said...

Great! It's a nice continued piece from last week.

Jean-Luc Picard said...

Excellent imagination, Guatami. You write so well.

Michele sent me here.

Paul said...

Very enjoyable read. I'm sure it was as much fun to write.

Awareness said...

Hey Gautami.......the intensity increases as you read along.....

I love your word tripping here....great work!!

Awareness said...

ooops.......Michele says hello and so do i!

Yolanda said...

Enjoyed this and I am glad to have found your blog

jeni said...

I really love how you rolled all of the traits into one character. Wonderful piece of prose.


Ingrid said...

I loved it!

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

I had thought to combine them all, but didn't. You blew it out of the water, it worked so well, like it was meant to be.

Tammi said...

You put so many of the childlike habits into such a small space! Very clever...Yeah, I wouldn't want to make her mad.

d.challener roe said...

Nice job...and I love the fact that we have a poet participating...

Steve said...

Sounds like how you would behave!
Ok maybe not, put down that knife.... come on be a good girl!

pjd said...

After the first few lines, of course I knew what was coming... until the end. What a great stark image to have her with a knife under her pillow. And her favorite knife at that. I've missed your previous entries, but I look forward to future Fridays!