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the sky was angry in the night
it fired onto me
it had the right
I had not asked to touch it
the space I took from the sky
it gave it back to me again
by cooling it with its tears
frozen though
I call it snow.
on the blade of one my branches,
some child will come
and pull at my hand
I will let it hold me
I will let him swing on me
tears of the sky will fall to the ground
mingling with the earth
and I will float to the sky
I patiently wait for that child
and his friends in the orange light
"remote held by sky, I grind to ground"
38 comments:
That's lovely..
this is very beautiful
I have often thought of snow falling as tears
these lines stand out to me
'tears of the sky will fall to the ground
mingling with the earth'
very beautiful!
Inventive personification of nature throughout your lines. Very well done.
i am well like the though of snow as tears frozen...
A very beautiful view of life from nature's perspective. Glad to have found you through One Shot.
This is deceptively simple as a poem, but actually, spreads out in many imaginative directions.
Liked this very much.
Lady Nyo
Full of feeling and wintry beauty. Those tears felt by so many.
Thanks for sharing with One Shot
"tears of the sky fell to the ground" all afternoon and most of the night here at my little corner of the world.
The poem is lovely.
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Gigi Ann
Aahh... this must be what nature would say/think with all the snow around..
There was a serene touch to this one, Gautami.. really peaceful and lovely.. and the image totally complemented the beautiful words..
Kavita, I don't put pictures to words. I put words to pictures. This is what is known as ecphrasis or ekphrasis...
Tears from the sky
Hit me in the eye...
Next time I'll wear sunglasses
It's beautiful. And tears will fall; they will certainly fall.
Gautami...?
You have snow?
Great poem either way!!
wonderful personification. Loved reading. all the best.
Great personification - strong images
Oh! Super. There's something in the images you create. Intense and clear.
It's so simple but my favorite line is 'I call it snow.'
I love how straightforward and honest it is. It's a beautiful clash with the images of space and fire.
i like the tears of the sky mingling with the earth...snowing us in...beautiful
Lovely. I really like the perspective of the tree held to the ground by the heavy frozen tears, wating for a child to set it free.
Ahhh yes, the uniqueness of snowflakes is reminiscent of our personal tears. Nice work!
Giovanni Cucullo
Lovely words, beautifully strung together.
A beautiful nature piece from the viewpoint of the tree...snow as "falling tears," makes for quite the image, a touch melancholy, but natural, personified, a smooth caress. Quite imaginative, and one which captures the beauty of Winter elegantly. I tried with photos on my own site following this recent "Snowpocalypse" but the poetic route is always satisfying for it!
Love the personification and vivid details-- a sheer delight!
~laurie
So much gorgeous writing between WWP and Big Tent, and this is no exception. You gave the tree a voice, explored the tension between her and the sky, and then the birth of ice. Absolutely lovely.
-Nicole
This is lovely - the trapped tree freed by the child is my favorite image.
Gautami, a beautiful succession of words.
Pamela
I love the concept of naming—I call it snow—
Wow! That was wonderful!
Oh, yes! An angry sky, a fun-loving chld. Really enjoyed the imagery in this piece.
Gautami, what a lovely and gentle poem. I love the way it reads and sounds.
ethereal feel to this. Very nice!
You created a mood for me and held it like a diamond, displaying now this flash, now that, cold and remote in the light but intimate in the heart.
My favorite part:
"I had not asked to touch it
the space I took from the sky
it gave it back to me again"
Really good!
Lovely. That orange light at the end stays with me.
A new way of looking at snow. Beautifully done.
Terrific mood in this poem!
I like you as a poet-tree.
Solid work, imagery, flow, ideas.
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