your green eyes beguile me
with a hint of a smile
vast sea behind you cannot diminish your aura
that mind stretches mine to limits
that voice pushes me beyond me
yet I only see that defined chin
my cerebral nature has turned verbal
intellectual into sensual
I seriously pretend to be casual
I pick up the sensitivity
gently hold it to me
let essence of senses take over me
"the mafia that is you holds me to ransom"
22 comments:
Love that last line!
this was a delicious write...and yes that last line rocked...
As usual, I loved your write. And I agree that last line was priceless!
Rings so true - not wanting to give way and yet your heart falling captive against perhaps your better judgment. Well written dear. Yes, it was a brilliant last line.
What a wonderful sensual poem! I love this one.
Beautifully crafted sensual poem - thank you
Nice very very nice Gautami. you write so well.
The words reverberate..the last line sums it up.
I love the way you worked with all three prompts to create this poem! Well crafted. I liked the third stanza: intellectual into sensual!
I like your style and what you said about this being your interpretation of the prompt. That is what poetry is about and I forget that. I really like this poem and I like the way you end with senses taking over you. Then the clincher at the end! Well done!
That would make one heck of a valentine. Head over heels.
Gautami this is sensual poem. I agree with Judy, it is our interpretation of the prompts. That is what poetry is all about.
Pamela
Beautifully sensuous. Absolutely love where you took this prompt. I had a difficult time with it and almost skipped it completely. Did however find inspiration. I love what you do Gautami,
Elizabeth
These are the words of someone in love. Great stuff, Gautami!
I enjoyed it so much.. Thanks for sharing...
Last line was perfect...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html
Passionate and sensual. What a tribute to a lover.
A lovely love poem.....dips into the good part of exotic.
Lady Nyo
I agree with so many of the other posters here - this is a lush, sensual, sensuous poem - and it is gorgeous.
so nice...and the last line was a powerful "wow"
Very nice! :-)
This was such an intense One Shot... beautiful! I think I can relate to this one all too well, Gautami.. :)
And I really like those last lines (the one in quotes) of your poems... they are the perfect summary!!!
A mix of sensuality, beauty and images... I like it. Thanks for sharing and for visiting and left a kind comment in my poem :-)
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