In the cobbled stonesI let my dreams run riot
I think of flaky pastries
soft and melting
may be a chocolate brownie too
sprinkled with nuts
is it paint that has coagulated
sticking to my shoes?I prefer mud
which has your footprints
cemented in it
butter-papered biscuits
burnt in the oven
hardened to carbon
I am left with cobblestones
"if you want you can taste the ground"
26 comments:
Powerful words, as always.
"which has your footprints
cemented in it"
Cool line!
Another good one..
Who would have thought bricks could make me so hungry?
What a mixture of strength and temptation..can feel it all!!
Powerful and wise words, love it :)
I said this before but I will say it again. The muddy prints always tell us where we have been.
I love this poem, from title to chocolate brownie to tasting the ground.
Beautiful images in this poem make me hungry as I read.
Gautami, really like this one, like the delicate bits of food, interspersed with the images of bricks and cemented footprints. As usual, really good writing,
Elizabeth
Gautami beautiful images created here.
Pamela
Gautami,
Wonderful images knocking against each other (as so often you do!)
Trulyfool
My favorite part was actually:
"butter-papered biscuits
burnt in the oven
hardened to carbon"
Maybe not as appetizing as those brownies, but a fantastic chain of phrases.
Oh, nicely done - as usual. Love the butter-papered biscuits...
I can see the chocolate brownies in those bricks... the second half of poem is powerful.."mud, which has your footprints cemented in it..." nice...bkm
So many food references from bricks. Although I've had some food that resembled bricks. Nice job.
incredibly delicate and enticing... lovely.
this was very enticing...chocolate brownies with nuts..I love leaving footprints in the mud. Enjoyed it as always!
Interesting vision. The thought of all this food makes me hungry.
This was such an amazing poem - and your imagination really does run riot! So much brilliant imagery! I am hungry just reading your words!
I prefer mud
which has your footprints
cemented in it
Aww!! :)
There's a palatable strangeness about this.
Love the footprints you have left here... cemented for the world to find.
Oh I like both of these. They're both "beautiful" in their own ways, different than the other and different from probably the conventional definition of beautiful.
The imagery is beautiful here, especially in the second stanza. And the first stanza made me hungry. :)
-Nicole
wondrous tale.
well penned.
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