the puzzles have been cut from the ground
these figures are symbolic
of the chaotic world in which whole become holes
the juicy bits of grass stick to the mud
stress queues up right in front
each puzzled hole gets a share
"rose tinted glasses can break,
but not the whole holes"
24 comments:
This may be my favorite! Provocative and powerful.
Sheilagh Lee said truly powerful words .
There's a lot of hole digging going on at the moment - this strong piece reflects our concerns.
Yes, great imagery and comment..another very strong piece..Jae
It's fascinating! "whole - hole" Thanks for sharing it with us!
I too liked the whole-hole
fragmented by stress
I know this breaking asunder
wonderful poem
and thank you for your kind comment
very true and a strong one
Very powerful on many levels.
Symbolic chaos... that's a jigsaw.
Excellent.
Beautiful use of the prompt words. Very much in tune with our world at this moment... on a precipice, trying to fit the pieces together.
Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/02/24/finally-fit-3ww-abc/
Powerful line - chaotic world in which wholes become holes. I've read your work before but I realized I missed a lot so I will follow so that doesn't happen again.
What a good pairing..whole, holes..very stong images!
I agree, another strong piece that just begs for a read - and re-reading.
I love the startling image "...of the chaotic world in which whole become holes..."
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'The chaotic world in which whole becomes holes' Love it! Nice Magpie.
just loved it, the way you mixed both themes and created a brilliant poem.
trisha
http://sharmishthabasu.wordpress.com/2011/02/24/stress/
Loved it from the title!
Each hole gets some stress... and hard to repair!
Sadly, a little chaos needed to find order...lovely world
The sad truths of life.. no?!
Good one, Gautami..
"the chaotic world in which whole become holes" -- really liked this line.. very profound!
what an observant take on the prompt.
we are all connected..one pull here means a push there and a shift here
love it.
scattered yet beautiful.
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