Thursday, November 04, 2010

charcoal shadows

just a drawing
charcoal on a piece of paper
a butterfly flits over hills
that spider calls out to me
into its parlour

the lovers that we are
together we make shadows
oblivious to the fact 
we have been immortalized
in this yellowed paper

"when the rooster enters it,
I almost resent its presence
what does he see that I can't"

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"together we made shadows" is the line contributed by Mallery. I changed made to make.

35 comments:

authorwho said...

That rooster has a lot of nerve! :)

Kay L. Davies said...

Good stuff!! "resent his presence" indeed!
-- Kay

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Ramesh Sood said...

Very beautiful poem..this! Happy diwali Gautami..

Helen said...

You have quite the eye for all the wonderful detail in the photo ... nicely written.

Peaceful Pandemonium said...

I don't know what the rooster sees, but its obvious he's watching you.

Peaceful Pandemonium said...

I had to post another comment only because the word verification was "mensa"

Objekte-aus-Ton said...

Kind regards from Germany.
Gaby

Strummed Words said...

An intruder! Nice Magpie.
Here's my Cock of the Walk

G.K. Asante said...

"The lovers that we are"

Very interesting stuff. Darn that rooster!

David Waters said...

powerful, well done.

willow said...

Hmm, what does he see? Nice piece.

Ralf Bröker said...

Oh: rooster no. two this night. Seems to be a farm somewhere ;-) Nice work.

Best wishes
Ralf

Sioux said...

He sees.......... Cool!

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

and what did the rooster see?
what's he gonna crow about in the morning?

Arian said...

I wish he could talk instead of crowing it all morning. haha

Linda said...

Being "immortalized in yellow paper." I love the imagery in this poem. It is so alive!

Kristen Haskell said...

Oh that is a nice piece. :)

Reflections said...

'the spider calls out to me into its parlour' love this. nice write.

Teresa said...

I love your take on the prompt! Who'd guess a rooster intruding on romance.

Strummed Words said...

Nice use of a line for your poem!
Silver Rain

Mary said...

Beautiful use of your chosen Big Tent words, an if I squint my eyes a bit I can see the shadow on the yellow paper!

Martin H. said...

Very nice, indeed.

Alice Audrey said...

He sees dinner. But then, so does the spider.

marianv said...

This is lovely.

Tumblewords: said...

You've penned a fine painting - immortal, it is.

sheila said...

Nice, but that rooster's a bit on the creepy side. lol

Linda said...

Watch out for that rooster. I like where you went with this poem.

marousia said...

Nice idea - the rooster as an interloper.

Jingle said...

have a festive holiday...
timeless theme,
lovely tale.

Deb said...

Incredible image!

malleryk said...

awesome!

flaubert said...

Gautami,
Love the imagery in this piece.
Pamela

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

Wow You did well with Mallory's line it fit in perfectly! I am really glad you liked the Allouette below is a link to the site I find so many poetry variations you might find others you like!
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html

Carrie Burtt said...

Thought provoking and beautiful...i love this one Gautami! :-)

Tina said...

Nice. Really nice.