Sunday, November 28, 2010

fallen

your brush 
strokes in the paint
as translucent as skin, 
I observe
the facial expressions.
holds all our secrets
no matter how much you try, 
the painting will not be an antidote
of your bloodied past
it would rather enhance your instinct
when your blade cut across bodies

"yet your engravings now project gratitude"

21 comments:

Jingle Poetry said...

unbeatable gratitude poem.
masterful job...

don't forget to link some of your poems to potluck tonight,
Happy Sunday!

gs batty said...

very nice. you covered them all with a brilliant poem
awesome

flaubert said...

Gautami,
I love this.
Pamela

oldegg said...

Terrifyingly beautiful.

Whitesnake said...

Nicely done but as always dark and dingy

Mary said...

This is lovely and painful.

Reflections said...

Amazing piece cutting deep within the cosmos to find thoughts of appreciation.

Bone said...

this planet
since we arrived here
holds all our secrets


Liked that part especially.

Understanding Alice said...

I like this, a real sense of the moment - life always follows us wherever we go :)

Nanka said...

Loved the beauty of the opening lines, then the next few lines seemed hopeful :) and then ended a bit sad and painful :(

Loved the way you have done this!!

DeLi said...

your verse,
strokes a life....

Amanda Moore said...

very intense I sense the beginning of an ending here....

Giggles said...

Beauty entwined with a very intense ending! Well done!

Wayne Pitchko said...

love this poem Gautami...thanks for sharing

faith said...

Wow, very dark write!

Teresa said...

This is such a beautiful poem. Very nice.

WarmSunshine said...

oh this was so intense...!! i love it!

Ian said...

excellent

jaerose said...

Delicate and beautiful..like a watercolour..Jae

Arts web show said...

Great poem.
You got some strong imagery there.
Nice job

Sumit Sarkar said...

Fantastic and beautiful...

"the painting will not be an antidote
of your bloodied past
it would rather enhance your instinct
when your blade cut across bodies"...

Nice... :)