Saturday, November 13, 2010

echoing parenthesis

parenthesis meets its match
in apostrophe
I listen to echoes. 

after a drab October, 
the early November sunshine 
cast golden rays on comma

another absurdity

46 comments:

Deborah said...

Wonderfully done, I loved it :o)

Strummed Words said...

An unusual but interesting use of the prompt line.

Teresa said...

So unique and fun! Perfect!

Sue said...

This one pleases me.

=D

5thsister said...

Quite unique and original for sure! This is microfiction to perfection.

Anna said...

Very clever and unexpected use of the prompt.
Well done!
Best wishes,
Anna

Anna's SC wk 28

Bookie said...

Pared to the bone here and very interesting....

faith said...

Very creative to see and hear what others do not. "Echoing Parenthesis" is a perfect title!

Judie said...

Very creative!!

Bill said...

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PattiKen said...

Nice! No question that the weather can affect the muse. Better to have that early November sunshine.

The Dark Lord said...

Great play with words, loved reading your poetry!

Ramesh Sood said...

Shine of commas make all the difference.. well said Gautami..

Harshad mehta said...

last line made me smile. Thanks.

indicaspecies said...

Clever use of the puncuation marks used in your poetry.

Harshad mehta said...

Brilliant.

jfb57 said...

This was really fun! Thank you!

anthonynorth said...

That was cleverly done.

nimaruichi said...

Interesting :)

My name is PJ. said...

a fresh take on the prompt!

Tracy said...

excellent

Kat said...

Such an original take on the prompt. I really like this. Of course, being a Southerner, commas are my favorite punctuation mark :) Kat

moondustwriter said...

I love the double meaning with punctuation

Ha!!

Nice 160

mine is here

Tina said...

Loved this. Completely unique.

Jack said...

Gautami,

Few days absence makes me lag so far behind,that when I read all I missed it boggles my mind,you write so well that when I read,to such a blissful satisfaction does it lead.

Take care

flaubert said...

Gautami,
I really like this.
Pamela

Monkey Man said...

What a terrific Sunday 160. Thank you for playing. Be sure to post a comment on my site so others can follow back to you. I would want anyone to miss this.

Brian Miller said...

some wonderful word play...love that is comes to the comma...or pause...

Nessa said...

Comma is very happy.

G-Man said...

Your punctuation is impeccable!

joanny said...

Poetic license, creative and filled with charm.

lovely 160 and more.

cheers,
joanny

Jannie Funster said...

Hmn, very very interesting thoughts! And the exclamation marks of cold cold winter to get our attention?

xo

Tgoette said...

Very clever take on the prompt!

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

how clever this is the second poem I have read today that incorporated grammar/punctuation lots of fun to read this!

sandra said...

original!!

a said...

This could be a triple meme - Saturday Centus, FF55, and Sunday 160.

Alice Audrey said...

That was me just now. I was trying to put in my name when blogger suddenly swallowed it and post as "anonymous". Blogger hates me.

liv2write2day said...

I love the personification of the punctuation marks--so clever. :0)
Victoria

shewriting said...

how cute! Thanks for visiting mine.

Claudia said...

golden rays on comma...love it!!

Jingle Poetry said...

brilliant 160.

Jingle Poetry said...

Welcome to our potluck week 10, a poetry award is assigned upon submission.
Old poems are welcome …hurry up, you have 12 hours to go before we are closed.
Hope to see you there. Cheers!
http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/11/poetry-potluck-moods-feelings-and.html

Me said...

Clever!
-C

cj Schlottman said...

Clever and unexpected! I personally never met a comma I didn't love. Like Kat, I'm from the South.

Thanks for this post..........cj

The Reason You Come said...

Clever piece! Nice personification. I enjoyed reading it!

Jenny said...

Holy Wow! This was lovely. Really, really an interesting use of the prompt.

I was fascinated by this link.

Thank you.