Tuesday, November 16, 2010

foregone and forgotten

night hour makes a mockery
of forgotten wisdom
resident death within life
is an ancient inevitability
(we forget that in the quest of immortality)
I pour divine wine
into a receptacle of floating waves
know this.... 
In my younger and more vulnerable years
I also gave my blood
which mingled with the earth

"violet of violence somehow fills the void"

39 comments:

Dianne said...

a universal truth.
beautiful and painful,
Di

Whitesnake said...

I see ya caught with ya pants down yet again!

Always the dark side....You don't know Darth do ya?

faith said...

"resident death within life" - such a somber thought! I think perhaps sometimes forgetting is good.

Steve said...

Precise word choices and short line breaks made this shine. Excellent.

TALON said...

"I also gave my blood
which mingled with the earth" - what imagery in those lines!

Powerful writing.

Teresa said...

This is such a great poem. I really love the powerful ending.

aldersprig said...

I liked this. It makes me want to know more of the story.

Gigi Ann said...

'forgotten wisdom' sad when it happens..

SuziCate said...

I pour divine wine
into a receptacle of floating waves
know this....
In my younger and more vulnerable years
I also gave my blood
which mingled with the earth
-absolutely fabulous, good imagery and positive truth

kkrige said...

"I also gave my blood
which mingled with the earth"

my favourite lines that tie it together

g-man said...

As always...Fantastic.
Such a powerful writer you are.

vivinfrance said...

Some dark poems have come out of this wordle. Yours is excellent.

Asobime said...

The simplicity of the word choice doesn't obscure the profundity of the thoughts.....beautiful.

Simplicity is the key here, I think.

Lady Nyo

Mary said...

Excellent work. As Viv said, so many dark poems appeared out of these words. Or maybe it is the season, as it gets dark sooo much earlier now. (here)

Brian Miller said...

you know that last line is intriguing in light of the context...i will mull over that one today...

flaubert said...

Wow, so beautiful Gautami.
Pamela

Eric Alder said...

I think the almost matter-of-factness about dealth makes this one even more eerie.

(Pour me another glass of that divine wine, will you please?)

Nice One Shot, Gautami!

Claudia said...

divine wine and blood, which mingles with the earth - this is strong

jabblog said...

This is most appropriate for this time of year.

gospelwriter said...

a bit of mystery here, as befits a poem with that touches on night, death, blood-letting...

b_ said...

Neat job of turning Nicole's words into your own. I really like pouring the wine "into a receptacle of floating waves".

ladynimue said...

You inspire , you enchant and yet you are a brilliance beyond par :)

Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike) said...

This is beautiful; a sentimental write to me.. :)
Thanks for dropping by and hope to see you around.. Glad to know you through our write.. :)

Kristen Haskell said...

dark and beautiful

PattiKen said...

Oh, yes. When young, we often believe in our own immortality, only to be taken aback when reality strikes. Nice.

Thanks for visiting my entry.

Monkey Man said...

dark indeed. i like.

Michelle said...

Intriguing. I love all the interpretations of Carry on Tuesday prompts.

Shashi said...

Dear Gautami
Its beautiful verse and emotional. The imagery is perfect. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing..


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Bill said...

a glass of wine
poured into the sea
my echoes

chiccoreal said...

Dear Gautaumi: Beautiful! The flow of the written words comes so naturally to you! It is a joy to read your words!

Derrick said...

Lots to enjoy in this, Gautami! The inevitability of death that we strive to forget, the divine wine, the blood mingling. All good!

ravenswingpoetry.com said...

Agreed with vivinfrance...you've outstripped me in darkness this week, with some excellent usage of the prompt words to create your imagery.

-Nicole

Marianv said...

You manage to say a lot without using a lot of extra words. Good job!

Nessa said...

Images of the thoughts experienced in the middle of the night.

mairmusic said...

Your images paint a picture, complex ans mysterious-- nicely done!

emily wierenga said...

love the parallel of divine wine and blood, and the sacrifice of it all. beautiful.

Pete Marshall said...

as always...a wonderful write...very clever...pete

Jingle said...

amazing writing.

Helena Malheur said...

Very clever and thought provoking. Enjoyed your use of language -- pouring "divine wine" and "blood" mingling with the earth... very nicely done.