Sunday, November 28, 2010

ripples

ripples in that lake
brush our shadows
sharp edges of rock
deflect light
moving sun melds
showing you and me
in throes of passion

"come feel my inner strength"

28 comments:

Cheryl said...

You've captured a moment so beautifully with your words.

Brian Miller said...

oh...quite intimate....like that last line....

Ames said...

Very absorbing!~Ames

5thsister said...

a lovely poem for sure.

Claudia said...

oh la la - this is quite a moment in time..nice

my 160

Jingle said...

awesome read..
lovely imagery on your 160.

Judie said...

Excellent imagery! I'm impressed!

Ramesh Sood said...

Indeed inner strength is what matter.. very well weaved..

Sumit Sarkar said...

Awesome imagination...
Brilliant poem...I love it :)

Viki said...

beautifully written. loved this so much. you are amazing ;0)

Nanka said...

Lovely imagery and a great idea well woven. Can see the strength of your poem here.

Kat said...

Your imagery is lovely, and you conveyed a moment so clearly in so few words. Beautifully written. Kat

Monkey Man said...

What a lovely picture you draw with this Sunday 160. Thanks for playing and sharing your great talent.

Dulce said...

Wow how can so much be said in just 160...
hummmmmm

liv2write2day said...

Your choice of verbs really brings life to this poem. Well done.

http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/11/28/sunday-160-to-awaken/

Katherine said...

You paint a perfect picture of a day to be envied. Nice 160

Tumblewords: said...

A perfect day, recounted with beauty.

moondustwriter said...

Love the way you have the light and water working for a beautiful effect in your poem - nice!!!

The Write Girl said...

Beautiful, passionate, and stunning. Lovely poem.

ms pie said...

the passion of strength rippling on the waters.. as the undertoe soothes one's way... love the simplicity of this lovely poem..

DeLi said...

sweet words

Amanda Moore said...

sounding so romantic I can see the sunsetting with the sillouhette of two lovers.....

Patti said...

What a beautiful picture your words paint...lovely interpretaion of the prompt.

kathew said...

lovely image-beautiful poem

Anna said...

Lovely poem.
I took away my first attempt at this, in case you tried to visit my post and found that it was not accessable. But it's working now. I have finally finished writing a Centus for week 30.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC wk 30

Jackie said...

That's beautiful Gautami! I would have not known it was Aries had you not mentioned it to me though.

Sue said...

Good images.

I liked it.

=)

Jenny said...

Beautiful imagery. Lovely evocative words. Thank you.