Friday, September 21, 2012

wrapped in solitude

where is your gaze, I ask?
I thought you had fenced it
wrapping it around moments,
each one an entity in itself
on these pages I see vacuum-
a solitude, no one else seeks.
in the newspapers, words unwrap
fall apart on my lap
I collect each one
and arrange in the busy alone-ness

"in my dangling shoes,
why do I have that fenced feeling?"

19 comments:

Claudia said...

nice..i much like the image of words, falling apart on your lap and then the collecting and arranging..

Daydreamertoo said...

Busy alone-ness. It seems this is not a happy solitude, maybe?

aprille said...

As you say: you don't need our approval: you know you are good. Poetic fragments artistically arranged.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

...."that fenced in feeling"....I remember! Makes one want to soar over it!

Mystic_Mom said...

Love how this reads...very nicely done.

Sabio Lantz said...

Fun - actually like the feel of this poem.
I don't see anyone else asking, but I will take a chance to break the taboo of poetry bloggers - "never question a poet's choice of words":

You wrote:
"where is you gaze, I ask?"
is that a typo? Is it suppose to be:
"where is youR gaze, I ask?"

PS -- please turn off word verification -- it is a pain

Peggy said...

I like the variety of images in this. Solitude is indeed different for each of us.

Isadora Gruye said...

I really like where the challenge took you. You reference a fence but build upon that idea, using other forms of containment. Very much liked the line about the page being a vacuum. Well done and Viva la

my heart's love songs said...

"words unwrap
fall apart on my lap
I collect each one
and arrange in the busy alone-ness"

absolutely stunning!

almaveras said...

Its wrapped...too good..

kaykuala said...

Yes, we shouldn't be bogged down with that feeling of being stultified. We're our own soul loving and capable of being loved. Nicely Gautami!

Hank

Helen said...

This is lovely .. fencing in solitude is an intriguing concept....

Kerry O'Connor said...

Very well-written poetry.

Susie Clevenger said...

Fantastic piece...there are times I feel so lonely "wrapped in solitude" other times alone is my freedom.

Susan said...

Yes, why feel fenced? Words fall apart and refuse the fencing you had imagined. Hmmm. Evocative!

Mary Mansfield said...

Great images in this, love those last two lines!

Teresa said...

This is a poem that is so easy to relate to. There are so many times I have felt fenced in also.

Margaret said...

moments... fenced in

We do that, don't we. Great metaphor.

Laura Maria said...

Oh you did an awesome job with the prompt. I like the feel of this. One can certainly feel the words you wrote.