Sunday, October 20, 2013

balance it out

scented tentacles of alluring spices,
do they make your mouth water?

I have built a fence with bricks,
now I hide in that tastefully decorated
tasteless kitchen so that I won't cheat.

nothing is left for me-
everything tastes like gravel-
I seem to wallow in trash.

I precisely measure out portions-
that balance that you gifted to me
occupies a place of pride.

my cooking is an amalgam-
created in a vacant space,
with no spark in sight.

"no one notices the efforts of my dieting
yet when I die, I will weigh much less"

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Afterthought@10/21/13: This poem is NOT about me. I am definitely not into dieting.  I believe in keeping healthy by proper nutrition and exercising. I am posting couple of pictures of myself....

36 comments:

Kalpana Solsi said...

when I die, I will weigh much less"

Why bother after death, eat well, stay healthy.

Plz . remove the word verfication

brenda w said...

Hate diets, love your poem. Well done, Gautami.

Sabra Bowers said...

I like the first line a lot. Interesting how these words took you to food and the kitchen. Well done.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"I have built a fence with bricks" is a very striking line. I think I would have to toss the weight/balance equipment out, for its presence would mock me. Smiles.

Mishla M said...

she eeks out her portions as well as joy.

S.E.Ingraham said...

You must do what you deem necessary Gautami...those who will comment will continue to do so...

Good poem with an interesting perspective using these words...and a haunting ending.

awakenedwords said...

love the end quote, and I do hate dieting

daphnepurpus said...

I too hate diets! And a haunting ending as S.E. Ingraham said. Nicely wordled!

irene said...

Those last two lines are killer.

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Gautami, love what you did with this Wordle, especially the kitchen and the emptiness conveyed.

The part about weight loss was actually quite... weighty!! Amy

Sharp Little Pencil said...

And hey, I understand about the spam problem. The only choice I have at Wordpress is moderation, which is a pain all its own... No worries! Amy

oldegg said...

It is a mystery to me that we so admire individuality but some consider we should all look the same. There is a touch of sadness in this telling piece.

adamsmurphy said...

The last two lines are the real "balance it out"... They haunt!

Robyn Greenhouse said...

At least the kitchen was "tastefully decorated" even if the food had no taste!

TALON said...

Sometimes I wish we came with little doors that opened directly into our souls...our shells are not US, they just get us from Point A to Point B in our lives.

This was a heartfelt and touching poem. Just beautiful.

annell said...

Very interesting...what about accepting yourself as you are? Just be healthy.

Gillena Cox said...

luv the poem; luv the sari photo

much love...

dsnake1 said...

well said!
the opening lines grabbed the attention. :)

Helen said...

Enjoyed this one .. I am NOT about dieting either, but trying hard to reduce my A1C number. Don't relish the idea of diabetic meds.

Tino said...

I feel like cooking! Lovely images.

Laura said...

"I precisely measure out portions-
that balance that you gifted to me
occupies a place of pride." this touched me.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Really well done--and I am gad it is not you!

Margaret said...

tastefully decorated
tasteless kitchen


Better less decorated and filled with love!

Susan said...

Hello Gautami! Thank you for the pictures and the poem wherein the brick wall is a perfect metaphor for the Hell some put themselves through.

Jae Rose said...

Wonderful imagery..even the smells had an air of melancholy..

SaraV said...

Guatami, food is definitely to be enjoyed--love those starting lines:-)

Kerry O'Connor said...

Dieting is such an awful concept and often is more unhealthy than just eating in moderation, and making healthy choices about what you put in your mouth.

Your poem was written with a great balance between the cook and the food.

Jinksy said...

Kitchens need to be tasting places... LOL

Susie Clevenger said...

The perils of dieting...I have walked its path. Like you I focus on eating better.

Katie said...

Very well written! I'm one of those crazy people who actually like dieting! Ha! Oh well! :-)

soulsmusic said...

Love those final lines, as usual, they pack a punch

Elizabeth

balance-point said...

Fourth try to leave a comment. Like those final lines, as usual, they pack a punch.

Elizabeth

Satya said...

Ah! Thats sad...
And last lines are awesome!

aspiritofsimplicity said...

nice poem. I like the way you used the words.

Mystic_Mom said...

Bread for the body, flowers for the soul. You are beautiful! And that is a great piece of poetry you shared. Nicely done.

ayala said...

It is a battle...I know. So hard. Loved your capture.