Tuesday, March 13, 2007

Journey within the mind....Sunday Scribblings

Sunday Scribblings prompt was dream journey. Infact on Sunday I was on a real journey. Read the the previous post. I wrote this a short while back as this has been playing in my mind. Again a terza rima. It is tuesday but I still post it as sunday scribblings...:D

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Journey within the mind

this is something I do not recognize,
although I am taken over by
intense feeling, none to very wise.

thoughts touching you, flying to the sky
rebounding back to me. In trepidation
I accept, look unseeingly with a sigh.

enormity of it registers in conclusion;
leaving me with feelings inexpressible-
my tears streaming with exclusion

of unfathomable emotions, non-analyzable.
journey within my mind continues
taking me to places which feel stable.

in my dreams, in all glory, all its hues-
peace pervading; my mind awaits you.

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26 comments:

Ghost Particle said...

amazing...the desires of the heart remain inside, forever.

Frances said...

all its hues-
peace pervading; my mind awaits you...
So glad you did your scrbble - just beautiful Guatami
Thanks for sharing,
Frances

Inconsequential said...

neat lil' poem :)

that was cool.

Whitesnake said...

It will always amaze me, your ability with words and expressing feelings

GeL(emerald eyes) said...

Hi,
I'm glad something told me to visit your site even though I was here yesterday, to see if you posted for Sun. Scribs.

Wondefully expressing dreams,longings, and hopes of the heart.

Kai C. said...

lovely

gautami tripathy said...

Mind play is a amazing thing, ghost.....

frances: thanks. Isn't it what we all desire?

Inconsequential: That is a terza rima. For now I am hooked to those...

Whitesnake: Words are what I got...

gel: thanks. I visited you and like what you wrote. I will link you too.

kai: thanks girl.

chiefbiscuit said...

Thanks for your visit. Wow, your poem certainly shows how wondrous a mind can be!

Don Iannone said...

Well done! Loved the inner journey with its many subtle turns and twists.

DewyKnickers said...

Thanks for stopping by. I like your poem, it really echoes how I feel at times.

Rose

xo

gautami tripathy said...

chiefbiscuit,don and dewyknickers: thanks. Mind does take us on a journey.

magiceye said...

love the dream! beautiful

writerwoman said...

taking me to places which feel stable.
I love that line. I would love to go to a place like that right about now.

puerileuwaite said...

A dream Journey
In my opinion
Would not cater to
Teenyboppers
or their minions (you try rhyming with "opinion")

It would feature
rockin' tunes
and screaming solos
for fans in t-shirts
instead of polos

;-)

Kristen Robinson said...

WOW this is wonderful!

XO
Kristen

Margie said...

Gautami
you have such a wonderful knack for expressing yourself!
This is excellent...lovely!

Keshi said...

we can dream (whether they come true or not) and thats the most beautiful thing abt life.

Keshi.

tinker said...

What a lovely poem. I just read about your journey in the previous post, too - which sounded like a peaceful journey as well.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I love the ending!

floots said...

journeys to ajmer and the mind
you are a well-travelled lady :)
cheers

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks writer woman, magiceye, kristen, , margie, keshi, tinker, andrew nd floots! I appreciate your opinions.

pug: You did well. Actually I am not much into rhymed verses unless I write structured poetry.

polona said...

loved your mind journey.

Pip said...

Thanks for commenting on my blog. I have always enjoyed reading yours as well, although I am terrible at posting comments! Journeys of the heart and mind can be very powerful things...

Janie Hickok Siess, Esq. said...

Wonderful!

I continued the story I began a few weeks ago. You can read it here: "Why Did I Say 'Yes'?"

paris parfait said...

I really like this poem - the longing and hopefulness - wonderful!

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks folks!