Thursday, August 28, 2008

making inroads into I know not what


orbs of your eyes suck me into it
I follow that unknown path
in a zombie like state
making inroads into I know not what
if I could write words on the sky
I would at least try that once
but this untread road is one way street.

"believe me, I don't wish to get out of it"

19 comments:

Donnnnn said...

I don't believe in One-Way streets..you can always turn around and go back.

Art and Poetry said...

Unusual poem, well done!

anthonynorth said...

Almost surreal in nature, this one. I liked it.

paisley said...

if the road is still offering you that which is unknown,, i cannot help but feel it is the right one... it is when you know it all and find nothing new,, that one should begin to think about turning around....

very interesting piece....

John's comments said...

Thanks about the tip off re American Sentences. I have rushed to find out more and have even done one. I tend to do Twitters on things I see so have the raw material for this form of poetry. One more step in learning about poetry!

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

I feel this spoke to me...it speaks to something I am going through right now. It is a one-way street, but for me, one that I suspect I will not want to return from. Thought provoking and profound.

-Nicole

tumblewords said...

I like this - wondering if one can actually go back, even when the inclination arises.

Michelle Johnson said...

One way streets can take us to interesting places if we're willing to see what's there. And, if you still like what you're seeing then I say don't worry about leaving. Explore to its depths. Nice job. Have a nice day.

Ghost Particle said...

when we go forward, everything is like this. bt then again, by going forward, this is exactly what I face :(

hey donn...dont turn back on an one way street and go against traffic!!! :P

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

I've known this feeling, myself. There's both fear and excitement with it; I don't want to get out of it, either.

Deborah Godin said...

A beautiful poem; you have plumbed the depths once again!

Jon Cox said...

Wonderful & well said!! :o)

Linda - Nickers and Ink said...

Skillful incorporation of prompts!

Blessings,
Linda

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Beth said...

I believe you!
Thank you for this lovely piece--

Stan Ski said...

Much as I like visiting places I know, there's always a thrill to discovering new places (of any description).

one more believer said...

amazing yes g... untread road is a one way street... a beautiful love story perhaps...

maekitso said...

Have you noticed that time stops on this one way street. How is that we get carried through a space in which time stands still? Great work.

polona said...

unusual but it works very well... love it

Cynthia said...

falling in love with the feeling
or being of vertigo, not wishing
to stop the descent.