Sunday, August 24, 2008

Senryu: Ruing it?

I tried a senryu after very long. Hope it works!

ideal resolves
very impressive show
bitter to swallow



24 comments:

kouji said...

a bitter pill to swallow indeed. good lines these. :)

Ghost Particle said...

i like this form alot. :)

Deborah Godin said...

Very nice, enjoyed the subtlety the form demands - I sure think you nailed it!

Raven said...

Nicely done.

Pam said...

I think you were very successful in the senryu. It is a new look at an old phase.

SandyCarlson said...

I agree with all your previous visitors. Very well done and oh so real. Thanks.

SandyCarlson said...

Just a reminder that your OSI prompt, spectacles, is up next week. Please let me know if this works for you!

DeLi said...

bittersweet.

anthonynorth said...

No matter how hard I try, I have great difficulty writing these forms. In this I'm afraid I lack the resolve.

Leatherdykeuk said...

Delightful indeed.

teric said...

This type is new to me and it is beautiful!

Jim said...

Hey Gautami, I like it! That's why I don't do New Years' Resolutions. I like sugar pills.
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Edward S Gault said...

Yes, ideals often look great on paper, and turn into nightmares when implemented-this was the twentieth century.
Thank you for sharing this.

Bill said...

New Year's Day
I can't break the habit
of resolution

tumblewords said...

Oh, it works!! Very well...

fourwindshaiga said...

Very nice!
Being a list maker, I have much experience with resolve. It is not always bitter.

Quiet Paths said...

Oh, i know this one! Very nice.

me ann my camera said...

Senryu, a new learning for me; from a human viewpoint rather than nature. There are many bitter pills hidden from view. Lovely.

MyBellavia said...

Great pen, straight on! Thank you!

Pat Paulk said...

I'm not sure how it works technically, but it jumped right out at me. Excellent!!

zoya gautam said...

..a very apt comment on human nature..many thanks..

one more believer said...

love the comments..i agree w/all of them!!

Greyscale Territory said...

Sharp, pointed poetry! Very good!

karen crone said...

yes. I'd say it works!
thanks so much!